I lost my best friend and God mother to my daughters 3 yrs ago so i wrote this poem what do you think of it?
What is making me feel so angry again, why am i crying for something so much, it is hurting i dont like this feeling that i have inside of me. I'm missing something in my life and it will never be replaced i know, but is there no way i can be away from this sadness, this loss i so grieve. Why did you take her away from me when she was so important to me, my friend, has gone, gone forever and she will never come back to me. I dream of her, its like shes here, but when i wake i cry as she is not near.
I want to hear her laughter, her kind tender words, but instead there is a silence and nothing to be heard. Goodbye my friend rest in peace, you will be in my mind always and forever, i love you.
2006-09-24 07:34:18 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
To me it sounds more like a letter than a poem, but who cares what i or anyone thinks. Obviously it came from your heart, poem or not, as long as it helps you heal don't worry about what anyone else thinks of it!
peace and love your way...
2006-09-24 07:39:54 · answer #1 · answered by wonderwoman 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
By "I lost my best friend and God mother to my daughters," you mean "Godmother OF your daughters," right?
That's very unfortunate and I'm sorry about what happened...
That doesn't really look like a poem, from the way you ended and started new sentences in the middle of each line. What you can do to make it look more like a poem is to start a new line for when you have a pause or break in the sentence.
But I think you did a good job portraying your emotions, which will enable others to easily relate to it.
2006-09-24 07:41:02 · answer #2 · answered by Craaaazy 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
The poem snds sad.. for obvious reasons. I'm not a magician to comment on your emotion... but you wouldn't believe how many problems I've handled well by listening to country music. I'm sure that there's a song in this poem somewhere. Keep writing or keep searching... a message from the heart never loses appeal.. (unless your being fake.)
2006-09-24 07:37:52 · answer #3 · answered by bigspoon 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I too lost a very good friend. I think your poem is beautiful, a tribute to your lost friend. If your poetry helps you through this terrible time, then it does not matter what others think though. It is the outlet of emotion that is important.
2006-09-24 07:45:08 · answer #4 · answered by susan w 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i think that is beautiful. I lost twins and I feel that way too. Time will make it not be so painful. I finally went to grief counseling after five years. It helps. Im sorry for your loss.
2006-09-24 07:38:46 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
that was ok (from 1 to 10 it was a 5 or 4)
2006-09-24 08:05:35 · answer #6 · answered by ipodlady231 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
WOW! You're all over the place there aren't you. Sad and angry with a dash of love is what I got from it. Also you need to work on the format.
2006-09-24 20:08:46 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
i love it!! i am a poet my self, and found that emotion is the best to write about, people love to hear thoughts and feelings. keep writting april, your great
2006-09-24 07:37:05 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sad but clear.
2006-09-24 07:42:59 · answer #9 · answered by JuJu 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
expressing your feeling through words is the sincere way to share your emotions,,,,,,,,,your poem reveals your healing by your grief
2006-09-24 09:40:35 · answer #10 · answered by STORMY K 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋