I lost my best friend and God mother to my daughters 3 yrs ago so i wrote this poem what do you think of it?
What is making me feel so angry again, why am i crying for something so much, it is hurting i dont like this feeling that i have inside of me. I'm missing something in my life and it will never be replaced i know, but is there no way i can be away from this sadness, this loss i so grieve. Why did you take her away from me when she was so important to me, my friend, has gone, gone forever and she will never come back to me. I dream of her, its like shes here, but when i wake i cry as she is not near.
I want to hear her laughter, her kind tender words, but instead there is a silence and nothing to be heard. Goodbye my friend rest in peace, you will be in my mind always and forever, i love you.
2006-09-24 07:32:28 · 10 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Good poems don't have to rhyme.
Who said that?
It is very heartfelt & true to life.
You should submit it to a writers magazine & see if they will publish it.
I think its authentisity is what strikes you about the poem.
Thanx for sharing it with us, that takes a lot guts.
Good Luck!
2006-09-24 07:44:15 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i don't like very much the beggining, it makes sense of what you feel but doesn't rhyme... but i love it since here: Why did you take her away from me when she was so important to me, my friend, has gone, gone forever and she will never come back to me. I dream of her, its like shes here, but when i wake i cry as she is not near.
I want to hear her laughter, her kind tender words, but instead there is a silence and nothing to be heard. Goodbye my friend rest in peace, you will be in my mind always and forever, i love you.
2006-09-24 14:47:28 · answer #2 · answered by mrs. cookie 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
No poems do not have to rhyme, but should show a recognized pattern to it.
Any poem is good if heart felt, and comes easily. You are noticably bothered by your friends passing. this is something along the lines that tatoos have a story behind them. (not saying get one)
do you have others? I do and would like to share.
2006-09-24 14:56:40 · answer #3 · answered by orion_1812@yahoo.com 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I agree with Gracie who says a poem dosen't always have to rhyme.It is the way you worded it that makes it beautiful and if it helps you feel better than so be it.
2006-09-24 14:53:24 · answer #4 · answered by DreamWeaver 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
thats a really good poem....but as long as it helps you get through it then id continue
2006-09-24 14:34:43 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I love it it's very nice.
2006-09-24 17:09:31 · answer #6 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good poem
2006-09-24 14:34:52 · answer #7 · answered by tdang424 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
you sound very creative
2006-09-24 15:20:27 · answer #8 · answered by Jubei 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It is so sad.
2006-09-24 14:52:34 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
It doesn't really rhyme...
2006-09-24 14:34:54 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 2⤋