Halloween
Halloween so very near
Trick or Treaters aren't even here
i got bored counting the days down
till Halloween barely got here.
I found my way out
I bought some candy and shout
"Halloween is almost here!"
1 day close
i am almost toast
Halloween is finally here!
Ghouls and Goblins with
witches galore
Why is Halloween here for?
Lets have a party
Because Halloween is alomost tardy
So lets all be dandy and eat some candy
And
Celebrate because Halloween
only comes once a year!
2006-09-24 02:56:16 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It's nice
2006-09-24 09:48:19 · answer #1 · answered by smalvina 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You need to read this poem out loud to a child because they will tell you exactly what they think. This will get the content answered for you.
If you want to know about the quality as prose, you need a lot of work. The meter is off by a mile the rhythm is lost and you have to stumble down the lines. A poem of any kind should have a gate to it that makes it a comfortable ride.
I hope that helps. Not meant to be mean, just honest.
2006-09-24 13:23:36 · answer #2 · answered by Cowboy Logic 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hope you are under 10 years old because that is just about the age this poem shows you to be. The rhythm is off, the meter stinks, the grammar is faulty, the spelling is terrible. It follows no poetic rules-yes, surprise!!! Poetry has rules!!!! Write later when you grow up..
2006-09-30 22:44:37 · answer #3 · answered by rhymer 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's great, and sincerly I couldn't write a poem like that myself. But, it sounds a little like it's more about rhyming than expressing your feelings even if the rhyming is great it's not necessarily the point of a poem. Now, keep it up. You're doing a good job, and remember a poem doesn't have to rhyme to be a poem.
2006-09-24 10:08:17 · answer #4 · answered by celine 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Could you tell us how old you are? Under say 14, this is a good effort. After that, I would say it's a bit childish.
Sorry, but I feel responsible for saying what I believe.
2006-09-24 10:40:03 · answer #5 · answered by auntb93again 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cute poem, but there are several grammar mistakes that should be cleaned up.
2006-09-24 10:09:37 · answer #6 · answered by autumnfaerie8 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I thought it was great because it was so true! Your format has a tiny bug but other than that it was fantastic!!!!!
2006-09-24 09:58:38 · answer #7 · answered by selam m 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's ok., keep it up.
2006-09-24 10:00:17 · answer #8 · answered by Dawn Treader 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋