i am yearning, burning
for who i want to be
put on my real face
put on that dress for me
with my hippy this
and my boho that
i smile my crooked smile
and look with my feisty face
i shake my head of curls
i dare to to see the real me
look closer world
im still burning for who i want to be
2006-09-23 21:15:41 · 15 answers · asked by shariwharton 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
young? im not young im 43. just because u get to my age doesnt mean to say u dont want to change the way you are..or how others perceive you. a lot of you have generalised how old i am without thinking of the person behind the words.
2006-09-23 23:17:07 · update #1
Ask people who really know. Have it reviewed here-
http://www.poets.com/
2006-09-23 21:19:25 · answer #1 · answered by david429835 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
There's something about it I definitely liked.
I think you're trying to show people who you are through how you look, but it's not quite coming across? You know there's more to you than that and you can express this through words. I think you're fairly young (teens), but I'm not being patronising – it just seems you've not quite worked out who you want to be yet, and this poem is an expression of that.
Oh, and it's not dark at all!
2006-09-23 22:06:58 · answer #2 · answered by kpbunches 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not dark at all, the way I read this poem it seems like its about someone who looks in the mirror and only sees a reflection, not who they really are and is searching for their true self to appear in the mirror.
NIcely written!
2006-09-23 21:21:08 · answer #3 · answered by Fantasy686 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
seriously pretentious and worthy of no praise whatsoever.
suggest you either stop feeling sorry for yourself or try cheering up a little bit. it seems as though you want people to feel intrigued by you but all you have succeeded in doing is boring them. trust me - i have shown other people.
sorry but badly written tripe and it's not dark, just bland.
2006-09-24 04:41:54 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I am what I am
This is the real me
And not what you want me to be.
You are free to be you
Offer no excuses
Live the way you choose.
You and me
Two different personalities
Living in harmony
For all to see
It's possible
If you let one another be :-)
2006-09-23 21:31:49 · answer #5 · answered by TK 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You desire to be somebody youre not. Nothing wrong with change I guess. I like it a lot, but it shows insecurity. Hope it's not you who it's describing.
2006-09-23 21:30:17 · answer #6 · answered by Scatty 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Dark? No, honey; it's just adolescent.
No one should write poetry when they are young, unless they are prepared to burn it after they reach sufficient maturity to realize just how bad it is.
2006-09-23 22:08:11 · answer #7 · answered by auntb93again 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
not dark n ur poem r cool
2006-09-23 21:21:22 · answer #8 · answered by hisahito 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I don't find it dark at all. I find it rather hopeful. Nicely done.
2006-09-23 21:17:44 · answer #9 · answered by Amelia 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
no darkness therz just a burning desire to achieve,,you will.
2006-09-23 21:18:05 · answer #10 · answered by GOOCH 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋