Your blood the serenity in my soul
you cant take away, take away, what you can't see
so as long as I hide that my heart still beats
youll never know the pain you caused
[chorus]
my heart is on fire
my soul is barbed wire
touch it and you bleed
love me and you burn
you wanna keep me here to hurt me
well ive got news
(brief pause)
you cant take away what you can't see
[/chorus]
a scar or a bruise I can't tell
im blinded by the pain inside
it came out from behind me
and attacked me when my guard was down
i couldnt hide what was inside me
you saw the darkest part of me
[chorusx2]
you'll never believe the truth behind the smile
pain that runs for miles
truth locked away
so i can be what you need me to be
Just something I wrote when I was thinking...
2006-09-23 14:26:20 · 17 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
I think your really good.Dont stop!
2006-09-23 14:30:09 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
I really like it, keep writing, its a great talent. You sound like you are good. On the road to being a writer.
2006-09-23 15:56:11 · answer #2 · answered by Norah 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good writing but too Emo. Makes you want to kill yourself. Plus Emo is very poserish. Write something happier.
2006-09-23 15:52:29 · answer #3 · answered by Onion? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good job you write like someone of the age 35
2006-09-23 14:30:13 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Thats amazing, im 13 too but could never write something as good as that.... you have the talent, so do something about it!! Reach for your dreams.....
2006-09-23 15:02:47 · answer #5 · answered by ♥ уσυ вєℓσηg ωιтн мє ♥ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds like every other crybaby poem I've ever read by someone looking for some sort of approval...
2006-09-23 15:54:07 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Yes you are very good
2006-09-23 15:07:30 · answer #7 · answered by ▒Яenée▒ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I hate poetry, but there is some solid talent there.
Keep at it
2006-09-23 14:30:04 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
VERY NICE!! Have you ever thought of getting published?
2006-09-23 14:30:05 · answer #9 · answered by munesliver 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
its very good i like it alot, maybe you can amaze us with another one ♥
2006-09-23 15:57:11 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋