tell me how you like this poem:
You said we are friends
That we should do things together
Tell each other secrets
Tell who we like
To keep our secrets between us
To me I think your a foe
You and I don't do things together
I tell you my secrets
You never tell me yours
I tell you how i like
But you never do
YOu never keep my secrets
You would just tell anyone
Talk to strangers
Talk to everyone that you
Just don't know
YOur not a friend of mine
YOur just a foe to me
YOur a fake
Your nothing
2006-09-23 10:12:39 · 21 answers · asked by honey + biscuit 4 in Family & Relationships ➔ Friends
* i wrote this poem for a friend that betrayled me. not all my poems are written hatred. hope you like it
2006-09-23 10:21:10 · update #1
THIS IS FOR A FRIEND THAT HURTED ME BADLY.
2006-09-23 10:24:43 · update #2
So much pain
2006-09-23 10:14:44 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I am sorry if I never have told you my secrests but well it is just cause I don't know you and your poem needs a bit reparing I am also sorry to say this but you asked me to tell you how I like it and the other thing is well I like doing my things my way and the other thing well I do things with you like the one that I am sending you this message then well I guess you don't know me cause it is as you said you are not my friend and I am not yours Bye.. You did good but needs a bit more meaning
2006-09-23 17:17:22 · answer #2 · answered by abeshawiwe!! 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its alright. it's a little too typical in my opinion, but some people like the blunt style. personally, i'm more into alluding to my true meanings. also, it has some grammatical errors, such as on line 6 (the "your" should be "you're"), on line 10 ("i" should be "I"), on lines 12, 17, and 18 ("YOu" should be "you").
other than that its pretty good.
2006-09-23 17:17:22 · answer #3 · answered by Megan 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it. it is really good.. somebody must of hurt you really bad... yeah it is going to take some time to get over but don't worry about them they not worth your time
2006-09-23 17:15:38 · answer #4 · answered by Tex 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ur always been a great poetry writer don't you know that. how many poetry have you written already? i love this but i like your other one. you know the "BROKEN LOVE." it sounded really great. so i guess this was written for rachelle you know the *****.
2006-09-26 21:25:34 · answer #5 · answered by AngelCakes 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow! Passionate! Sounds like my freind! I love it! Mind if I use it?!
2006-09-23 17:15:01 · answer #6 · answered by Deauxe 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hey I just broke up, and available
2006-09-23 17:16:00 · answer #7 · answered by Freddy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats deep it makes me think about a friend i used to have
2006-09-23 17:16:11 · answer #8 · answered by MsJ 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's nice... Did you just break up with somebody?
2006-09-23 17:18:02 · answer #9 · answered by marius 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're for you are
Got him off your chest now?
2006-09-23 17:15:20 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋