What do you think of my poem?

Question

A church steeple is stood outside,
In every body's sight,
Where anybody can wak in,
To see Jesus's light.

As children of our lord God,
Foolish men are we,
Yet we walk on through this long world,
While heavens above grieve.

No one will ever understand,
The way of our Gods power,
It's something that we choose to find,
In this world that's so sour.

Go on abusing God's gift of life,
Heaven will come to die.
And with our thoughtless, childish minds,
We won't understand why.

Answer 1

great poem. you should have it published.

Answer 2

I believe your poem shows much talent. Keep on with your thoughts and continue writing. Very Nice!

Answer 3

I am positive . iam going all the way and i want to find the heaven in me . that's where the light is in ,Jesus's light.

when i change the world also changes.

POSITIVE.

Answer 4

It's very cliched and does not flow well. You need to put more emotion into your poem. Right now it sounds like your heart is not in it.

Answer 5

I liked it except the verse...'Heaven will come to die' That made no sense to me....I would have understood it if you'd said 'Earth will come to die' But that's just me, keep up the good work.

Answer 6

I like it alot you you need to check your spelling but it realy is good keep writing

Answer 7

its a little confusing but nice to hear..i mean sound good..

Answer 8

i love it. it made me stop and think... about everything we take for granted.

Answer 9

thats really good