can anyone help me with english please??

Question

1. Joseph and I spent the better part of the afternoon at the beach even though it was rather rainy that day and I suspected that I had a hole in my right shoe.

2. In order to finish the room, which was currently green in color, I washed the walls with Simple Green cleaner and then used a paintbrush to paint the walls, starting with the northernmost wall first.

3. I went kayaking on Thursday, but I forgot that my friend had borrowed my kayak, so I went over to his house and got it from him even though he lives way out past North Kenai and I live pretty close to Sterling. Then I went kayaking on Scout Lake until it got dark. Brought the dog, too.

4. Due to the fact that I like scary movies, I watched three in a row on Friday night and in spite of the fact that I was very tired could not fall asleep until such time as I stopped being scared.

Revise the following sentences or paragraphs

Answer 1

All a bit wordy, no obvious screaming errors just nitpicky stuff // here are suggestions only - - -
1) as is can be 'excused' as conveying your personality, the writer's identity - - - but think about this
I spent the better part of the afternoon with Joseph even though it was rainy that day and I suspected that I had a hole in my right shoe. - - - - (suggest dropping 'right' stick with shoe, let the reader imagine).

2) A complete muddle - - - what is the point ? However I am game -- --- --

In order to finish the room I washed the green walls with Simple Green before using a paintbrush to paint he walls, starting with the nothernmost wall first.
Though the use of word paintbrush is reduntant, in slovenly America most would say - - - - I washed the walls with Simple Green before painting the walls - - -

3) again a muddle too much detail - - - - ugh - - - leave it as your own signature - - - or do the parentheses thing. could suggest - - - "I whistled to the dog and we went kayaking on Scout Lake until it got dark."

4) could be truncated without losing face - - - I watched three scary movies in a row on Friday night and despite being tired I was to scared to sleep.

Peace..

Answer 2

1. Joseph and I spent the better part of the afternoon at the beach, even though it was rather rainy that day. I suspected that I had a hole in my right shoe.

2. In order to finish the room, which was currently green in color, I washed the walls with Simple Green cleaner. I used a paintbrush to paint the walls, starting with the northernmost wall first.

3. I went kayaking on Thursday, but I forgot that my friend had borrowed my kayak. I went out of my way to his house to get it from him, ( even though he lives way out past North Kenai and I live pretty close to Sterling.) Then, I went kayaking on Scout Lake until nightfall. I brought the dog, too.

4. Due to the fact that I like scary movies, I watched three in a row on Friday night. And, in spite of the fact that I was very tired, I could not fall asleep until such time as I stopped being scared.

Answer 3

what do you want me to do?
you have just given four paragraphs.