Can anyone help me edit this introduction for me?? I am having a hard time=(?

Question

"We encourage you to participate in the Air Quality Management District’s (AQMD) Trip Reduction Plan. The plan help reduce air pollution by participating in sharing rides, taking the bus, or riding a bicycle to work. "

Answer 1

...Trip Reduction Plan which helps reduce air pollution by sharing rides, taking the bus, or riding a bicycle to work.

I hope this helps.

Chow!!

Answer 2

It sounds pretty good, but why not try this instead?

"We strongly encourage you to participate in the Air Quality Management District’s (AQMD) Trip Reduction Plan. The objective of this progressive, new plan is to help reduce air pollution by means such as participation in ride-sharing and carpooling, taking the bus or other public transportation, or riding a bicycle to work."

Answer 3

“We are encouraging you to participate in the Air Quality Management District’s (AQMD) Trip Reduction Plan.
The plan reduces air pollution by participating in sharing rides, and taking the bus, or riding a bicycle to work.

Answer 4

well its pretty good except the last sentence should be "the plan will help reduce air pollution by sharing rides, taking the bus or riding a bicycle to work"
--or something like that

Answer 5

The first sentence is fine. "This plan will help to reduce air pollution by those who participate share rides, use public transportation, or ride their bicycles to work."

Answer 6

I like the way you have it put, but nido_tr3s has a great example on how to reword it, and make it look a little cleaner.

There were also a few others that sounded good, maybe after a wile you will beable to mix one, two, or even three. together and make a whole new better way to word it...

Answer 7

maybe after "the plan" and before the "help reduce" you should put a "would"!!