Please read mine
http://www.sffworld.com/community/story/640p0.html
I would appreciate your comments
michaeljayuk@yahoo.co.uk
2006-09-21 04:31:09 · 4 answers · asked by Michael E 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It was quite boring. There was no hook, nothing to draw me in. To be honest I only read the whole thing because I saw that it was *short* short story. You can get away with calling a work of fiction a short story as long as it's less than 100 or so pages (however many words that equals I don't know). Use those extra words to add in more detail, some imagery, maybe even...a plot.
2006-09-21 16:05:24 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I've started reading your story, but stopped soon after.
The idea you sketch might be nice and it definately has a potential, but it reads like a cyclopedia. Start with something interesting to catch the readers attention and afterwards mix your ideas in the plot. This way everybody will want to read it.
2006-09-21 12:14:01 · answer #2 · answered by Jezabeel 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very nice, but a bit dry. Not enough imagery. Try adding a bit more depth to help pull readers in.
2006-09-21 12:39:56 · answer #3 · answered by BookLovr5 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
OK ! But will you read this non-fiction too ?
http://globalresearch.ca/
http://thetruthseeker.co.uk
2006-09-21 14:26:21 · answer #4 · answered by Tommy D. 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋