The Light Within The Shadow
In each shadow there exists
Evil deeds and hazy mists
Twisted minds they writhe in fright
Hiding from the new found light
For every heart lays twixt their height
Lies their true essence, their true light
Evil shrieks and leaves its place
Light consumes and fills that space
And every soul which slays the beast
With dagger, sword, and mace will feast
Their new found light shall rest in peace
Forever for all eternity...
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2006-09-20 18:27:49 · 26 answers · asked by ? 5 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
This is a metaphysical style of poem dealing with the question of integrity. The central theme is a struggle.
The use of rhyming verse gives it cohesion but as with all
Rhyming verse it can contain the limit of the descriptive
Language used. The poem is written in a romantic method. Similar to the poetry Andrew Marvel poems.
These poems looked at questioning of ideals such as “Good verse Bad” or “health verse illness”.
Congratulations poetry can be difficult style to crack
Look to find you personal voice the “You” in the expression.
2006-09-20 18:52:54 · answer #1 · answered by alfred jarry jnr 2 · 3⤊ 0⤋
5
2006-09-21 06:02:30 · answer #2 · answered by Ω Nookey™ 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
7
2006-09-21 01:36:06 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I thought your poetry was going to be like most of the other poems that are on yahoo answers, but it was significantly better.
I am no where near as good as you are. You definitely have major potential to be a good writer one day if your not now.
It was a bit over blown with darkness but other then that it was perfection.
I also like how you use a shadow as a beast, but I don't understand the whole dagger thing?
8.5 AMAZING POEM!
2006-09-21 02:44:25 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
6 or 7 i would drop the last line entirely
their new found light shall rest in peace
seems to finish the piece nicely
good job though more people should find
self expression in artistic manner
2006-09-21 02:25:49 · answer #5 · answered by oddbs2 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It rhymed, and it kind of made sense.
It had a message, and was pretty angsty with just the right amount of noble touch. A tad idealistic, so I rate this a 7 or 8
2006-09-21 01:38:09 · answer #6 · answered by Shinigami 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Your poem has a glowing title. In the last poetry class I took, I finally stepped outside of rhyme. But, as a rhymer at heart, I really enjoy this poem. If you took away the rhymes, what do you think it would do to this poem?
Rate: 7
2006-09-21 01:47:20 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
i like your poem nice piece 3. when i read a poem i like to read more than once. two see if i get the same reaction as the first time i read it. with this piece it was a bit different each time. which is for me is a good thing makes me think a bit more
keep it up shadow.
2006-09-21 02:03:47 · answer #8 · answered by twocrows 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
well the poem is good if you talk about its idea, but it is too negative, life, heart, and soul is far more beautiful than what you have written, of course good n bad go hand in hand , but then what every you put in light shows greater. anyways i wuld rate it just as 4 on 10
2006-09-21 01:40:22 · answer #9 · answered by sandeepa 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Not bad, it flows well. There are moments where it falters, however, so few. Rhyming verse is difficult to maintain a message at times, but you do well enough.
7/10
2006-09-21 03:03:46 · answer #10 · answered by silenceheldstill 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋