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Question

CAN YOU FIX THESE PARAGRAPH FOR ME?? ENLISH IS MY SECOND LANGUAGE AND I"M STRUGGLING IN GRAMMAR THANK YOU..

Are children generally happier when they have to choose among fewer choices, or given no choice at all? From this question i came up with hypothesis. if you have too many choices then you can tend to get stressed out and wonder if you made the right choice among the millions of choices that you have. Just like the psychologists say that when you give children too many cereals to choose from, for example they will get very stressed out and unhappy. Therefore, from my point of view, with given them no choices at all would certainly make them happy.

Answer 1

Just spell the words as best as you can. Your not going to get graded on it.

Answer 2

Generally, the grammar itself is generally good except for the last sentence which is not clear. But there are also many other sentences which could be written better. Take note that we do not choose among choices, but among alternatives. Here is your essay rewritten, but I try to maintain the originality:

"Are children generally happier when they have fewer alternatives to choose from, or given no choice at all? From this question, I came up with the following hypothesis; if you have too many alternatives, then you tend to get stressed up and wonder if you made the right choice among the millions of alternatives that you have. Just like the psychologists say, that when you give children too many cereals to choose from, for example, they will get very stressed up and unhappy. Therefore, from my point of view, if they were given no choice at all, they would certainly be happier."

By the way, what is your first language? I could use some help with German.
Judging from what you wrote, I think your English is already really good. Keep it up and good luck!!
Best wishes!

Answer 3

Are children generally happier when they have to choose among fewer choices, or when given no choice at all? From this question I came up with a hypothesis. If you have too many choices then you can tend to get stressed out and wonder if you made the right choice among the millions of choices that you have. Just like the psychologists say that when you give children too many cereals to choose from, for example they will get very stressed out and unhappy. Therefore, from my point of view, giving them no choices at all would most definitely make them happier than if you let them choose.

Answer 4

Are children generally happier when they have to choose among fewer choices or when they are given no choice at all? From this question, I came up with hypothesis: if you have too many choices, then you tend to get stressed out and wonder if you made the right choice. Just like psychologists say, when you give children too many cereals to choose from, they can become very stressed out and unhappy. Therefore, from my point of view, giving them no choices at all would certainly make them happy.


I don't necessarily agree with you but, I think this says things clearly and uses proper grammar.

Answer 5

use or are given in your first sentence. Capitalize the letter I when referring to yourself use have before cume uw with and the befor hypothesis. Capatalize each word at the beginning of each sentence. Put another comma after example. Change given in your last sentace to giving. Add it before all.

Answer 6

your wrong ..children want to answer so they feel part of your problem..and if they couldnt answer than they feel left out of the situation

Answer 7

That was a good answer Fleabag ( ;

Answer 8

.If capitilize after a full dot.

explain who is ''they'' and ''them'' ?