read this poem i wrote and tell me what you think please.. thanks!!
Show me who you are,
Stop me, before I go too far.
Are you leading me on,
Please don't just end up being gone.
Please lower that bar,
Don't be afraid to show me who you are.
You're scared to get hurt,
You're scared to get treated like dirt.
Yet I'm not going to hurt you,
If only you really knew.
I understand you're scared,
But only if you would've dared.
You could have had me,
But friends we will be..
2006-09-19 12:27:18 · 24 answers · asked by Andi 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
I like it. It sounds like someone wouldn't let that wall down and let you see the real person they are. They weren't sure if they could trust you enough to let you know their feelings. But I bet they would in time. Sounds like you really care about this person.
2006-09-19 12:31:26 · answer #1 · answered by Just Bein' Me 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sounds like the person who wrote this wants more than just a platonic relationship, and the person it was written to and about is scared to be in a relationship. this person has been hurt before by another person. sometimes it is hard to get over the hurt, but life goes on and it only does if you let it.
2006-09-19 19:30:31 · answer #2 · answered by nurseknowitall 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry, it sounds like something a 12 year old might write. Keep working at it. You may have talent you aren't tapping into.
2006-09-19 19:30:18 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that it shows great talent and strong feelings for someone. As well I think that poetry is a great release of engry and with talents like yours it might be a great source of income.
2006-09-19 19:29:44 · answer #4 · answered by Amber 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's sweet actually...youthful, but sweet, you might want to work on your syllables...a poem flows better if there are the same number of syllables in each line...Best wishes to you.
2006-09-19 19:34:51 · answer #5 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
with all of these answers isn't it ganna be hard to choose the best one? anyways it is full of explosive emotions (___wat ever that means---) hey the first three letters of emotions is E.M.O. sweet. i found out something new for today!
2006-09-19 19:37:55 · answer #6 · answered by Aycilla 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that it is a very good poem
2006-09-19 19:29:19 · answer #7 · answered by Britt 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good! Powerful emotion.
2006-09-19 19:28:59 · answer #8 · answered by Mike 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow! I love your poem. You have some talent!
2006-09-19 19:38:58 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
the "lower the bar" line doesnt sound that good
2006-09-19 19:33:01 · answer #10 · answered by Daniel 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋