This is a piece of my rap about drugs, I know many raps about drugs are lame but
Don’t judge it before you listen to it.
Conflict with it, makes you tick, amidst its many risks, you get frisks,
By police officers do you want that, if you do I tip my hat, While I go,
The opposite way, not me, no nay, I’d rather see the suns rays the next day.
In exchange for the high you die, and possibly lose your family ties
Say goodbye, because I have feeling, that whatever dope you’re dealing,
Is gonna have you smoking it and kneeling, as if it were the king,
You might as well give it the crown and lie down, because I can see it,
It got you, pound for pound.
2006-09-19 03:38:43 · 5 answers · asked by Shawn T 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
Honestly, it's a little cliche. It's not bad, but it's just not original. I've heard all of those lines spit in a slightly different way already before. You have to really become a poet when you write rap, express yourself in a more creative way. I suggest increasing your vocabulary and trying to use more symbolism. What I mean is, hide your meaning. Make people really think about it to understand your meaning. It's kindda like your pound for pound line. You used a general term for boxing to illustrate the grip of drugs on someone, I like that, use stuff like that more often.
I encourage you to keep up the work though. As a musician myself, I know it's hard to stand up for the judgement of your work and I admire that about you. Keep working and you'll be able to acheive something greater than you ever thought possible.
2006-09-19 04:24:59 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's hard for me to say anything good about rap. I just don't like the genre. However just listening to your lyrics does not allow me to judge your song appropriately. I guess if I could actually hear it then maybe I could form a more positive or at least constructive comment.
2006-09-19 11:13:53 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Idont listen to it but I think it has potential try again and think of what you are all about
2006-09-19 11:36:41 · answer #3 · answered by Shawnee 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
sorry, i dont' like it, it needs work
maybe it would be better if we could hear the music you are putting with it though.
2006-09-19 10:46:57 · answer #4 · answered by *~HoNeYBeE~* 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it...............i dont see what everyone else was thinking saying they didnt.....................can i hear more
2006-09-20 21:53:58 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋