What was it the ghost saw. Regarding the most flawed. The ghost never gets heard. But life is what you earn. So what did he see. The right to be free. Like the phantom of the opera. Let no person stop ya. He kept being invisible. It's all divisible. With all it's sub-sets. Life becomes subsequent. The lost then becomes potential. In this life becoming more sequential. The will to survive is all to essential. Evolution of thoughts. Can bring about dreams. The revolution of thoughts. Can bring doubt to the screen. So how do you know the ghost has eyes. If the ghost speaks not. The ghost tells no lies. He's real kid. Reveal this. Then tell me what the deal is. So ahead of the ish this life can provoke. Not behind a cloak. Behind his premonition. Like wanting to create after demolition. Like saying nothing expecting others to listen. I go on repecting and playing my position. Life is but one big exhibition. A man on a mission. Telling the fake not to audition. A ghostly vision. Let them play on, I'll do no wishing. At the end of the exposition. Throw this in. Let's put the fake in remission. Points among the missing. Like the ones they never provide. Them drama loving haters I can divide. I'm so fly I glide. I can pretend to tell the truth all day. Then say nevermind.
2006-09-18 13:47:15 · 12 answers · asked by Thin King 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
Wow. That's deep.
2006-09-18 13:49:36 · answer #1 · answered by an_immortal_angel 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
style - "amateur poetry night" personally, it sounds like you are trying too hard. it didn't have a smooth flow to it. i mean it was alright but here's my advice:
1. not everything has to rhyme. i know it sounds cool, but it doesn't make sense all of the time.
2. punctuation isn't always over-rated. question marks and commas allow the reader to understand more.
3. lastly, i didn't get the ghost thing. it was trying so hard to be "deep" that i couldn't understand what you were getting at.
4. keep writing. you will develop and progress if you do.
2006-09-18 14:02:20 · answer #2 · answered by beckray 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Man in remission needs to go fishin' !!
2006-09-18 13:50:45 · answer #3 · answered by *ELiZaH* 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
ghost obsessed? i cant believe i waste my time to read that
2006-09-18 13:51:37 · answer #4 · answered by kagome5378 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
non rhyming nonsense
2006-09-18 13:55:26 · answer #5 · answered by Mopar Muscle Gal 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wait i don't get it what style?
2006-09-18 13:49:29 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think you are ugly, bumish, and stupid
2006-09-18 13:49:54 · answer #7 · answered by atwatermarie 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Gay anger?
2006-09-18 13:49:21 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
whoa!
2006-09-18 13:48:26 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
gothic?
2006-09-18 13:48:44 · answer #10 · answered by Blondie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋