Pluck out my eyes
I see people living in evil lies
Cut off my ears
I hear how theirs souls scream from fears
Tear off my skin
Because I look like Gods kin
Tear off my head
I don’t want longer to be sad
Open my skull
To check if I am a foul
Burn me into coal
What matter in me is just soul
Help me not to fall
Because from Hell I hear a call
Cut off my hands
They can spoil with blood those lands
Cut of my feet
I feel Hells fire heat
Try to redeem my soul
I feel Gods wings howl
I pray to Him
Because I commit grate sin
I wait for your choice
My ask is in my voice
2006-09-18 09:07:02 · 11 answers · asked by Robert M Mrok (Gloom) 4 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
what a great poem, if you wrote this, you have real talent.
it made me think of judgement, forgiveness, so maybe the title should reflect that. 'Judgement day', or 'forgive me' could work. It also has many refrences to hell and god, maybe you could use these refrences to give you a title.
If you have written this, and you are anything like me when i write, this will be very personal and mean a lot to you. If you have the skill to write such a great piece, you too have the skill to give it a name. So take note of our suggestions, but be aware that in time, it is likely to name itself.
2006-09-18 09:23:41 · answer #1 · answered by beanie 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Chief of Silence and Excellence
Despicable Mother with Teeth of Coral Who Plans in the Ancestral Grave
Fire of the Cairn
Gambler Gifted with the Turquoise Lance and Who Dwells in the Room of Flame
Ghastly Hell
Hidden Youth That Plots in the Wicked Chamber and is Held by the Great Tunnel
Light of the Desecrated Cairn
Lute of Poison
Princess Fire
Rapier of Platinum
Seriousness of the Oubliette
Sultan Fathered by Death
The Purple Lover who Parented the Mysterious Grandmother
The Teacher That Visits the Minister
The Tsar Caressed by Nothingness
The Courageous Mystic Thief
The Eighth Illuminated Czarina That Obtains Mirages
The Intelligent Red Gambler in Foulness
The Serene Contemplator
Voulge of the Firey Halls
Habiliment of Iron
Insane Darkness
Lover with Teeth of Zoisite
Marquis Frozen Illuminated Orahalcium
Marquis Writings
Maul of Greed
Morning of the Oubliette
Princess Hopelessness
Spear of Blight
Steel Emperor Who Feeds in the Stronghold
The Deadly Heir who Wed a Sacred Sultanna
The Unknown Czarina who Shall become the Tsar
The Corrupt Crone of the Copper Lance
The Crazed Princess with Lips of Zoisite
The Fifth Elder Who Loves the Thinker
The Generous Czar in the Words
The Sagely Mystic Rogue of Agility
The Tenth Murderer Nursed by the Mystic Citadel
The Twisted Queen
2006-09-18 16:17:54 · answer #2 · answered by Violet Pearl 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Ill-Considered Doggerel.
2006-09-18 16:10:44 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Unedited verse. foul or fool or fowl? G-ds or G-d's wings? G-d has wings?ask or question? I've never heard your voice, but I read your unedited writing. Try again a bit harder and I might answer "Lamentations from a confused idealist".
2006-09-18 16:20:17 · answer #4 · answered by Nightstalker1967 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If you want a simple title for your poem try something with one word like "redemption" or to pick from one line I liked best to sum it up I would use "Help me not to fall"
2006-09-18 16:15:51 · answer #5 · answered by Behhar B 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cut you all over!! this poem is like a Hattory Hanzos sword!
2006-09-18 16:26:20 · answer #6 · answered by nonono 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Morbid at Best
2006-09-18 16:15:26 · answer #7 · answered by lisa46151 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
"Ridiculous Waste of Paper & Ink"
2006-09-19 00:07:49 · answer #8 · answered by Bunky the Clown 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"Bloody Drivel"
2006-09-18 16:14:36 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
sado-masochism
2006-09-18 16:13:36 · answer #10 · answered by vick 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋