In pursuit of excellence we have always been reinforcing our commitment to provide utmost care and customer satisfaction. Keeping abreast of modern requirements and adhering to the global standards of service, the redesign reflects our new energy of confidence, attitude and service. The all new look and makeover will commensurate with quality and attention to detail providing inimitable services that are aesthetically rewarding and functionally fulfilling.
2006-09-17 23:53:44 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
In pursuit of excellence, we have always been reinforcing our commitment to provide utmost care and customer satisfaction. Keeping abreast of modern requirements and adhering to the global standards of service, the redesign reflects our new energy of confidence, attitude and service. The all-new look and makeover will commensurate with quality and attention to detail providing inimitable services that are aesthetically rewarding and functionally fulfilling.
Grammatically ok but some punctuation was missing. Have put it in as above.
2006-09-17 23:59:39 · answer #1 · answered by young_friend 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
In OUR pursuit of excellence we have always reinforced our commitment to provide the utmost care and customer satisfaction. WE are keeping abreast of modern requirements and adhering to global standards of service. The redesign reflects our new energy of confidence, attitude and service. The new look and moreover will BE commensurate with OUR quality and attention to detail. WE ARE able to provide inimitable services that are aesthetically rewarding and functionally fulfilling.
To me this ways is a more "active" voiced way of writing. It makes a stronger statement.
2006-09-19 05:46:05 · answer #2 · answered by Patti C 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In pursuit of excellence, we have always been reinforcing our commitment to provide utmost care and customer satisfaction. Keeping abreast of modern requirements and adhering to the global standards of service, the redesign reflects our new energy of confidence, attitude and service. The new look and makeover will commensurate with quality and keenness, thus providing inimitable services that are aesthetically rewarding and functionally fulfilling.
2006-09-18 01:50:10 · answer #3 · answered by genuineanya98 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When did "commensurate" change from an adjective to a verb??? It is a descriptive word , not an action word. The phrase should be "The all new look and makeover will BE commensurate ' etc...
In pursuit of excellence, we have always etc-comma after "excellence". The next sentence is punctuated correctly. The last sentence needs a comma after "detail". To me the biggest error is the misuse of "commensurate".
2006-09-18 16:10:29 · answer #4 · answered by rhymer 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Besides the comma and punctuaction already described to you....
(1) 'we have always been reinforcing' should be more direct with 'we have continually reinforced'
(2) There should be a dash between all and new 'The all-new look'
(3) It should read 'will be commensurate'
Good luck!
2006-09-18 00:32:43 · answer #5 · answered by kenny_the_bomb 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sorry mate but this statement is full of hyperbole. Nobody is going to believe it. Tone it down a bit and you will achieve a stronger result.
2006-09-18 03:05:56 · answer #6 · answered by analyst 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
"will commensurate with" should be "will BE commensurate with"
2006-09-18 00:27:16 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
couldn't find any typos or spelling mistakes
2006-09-17 23:55:58 · answer #8 · answered by antigone 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
SPELL CHECK>GRAMMERCHECK YOU MORON
2006-09-18 00:19:05 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋