Do I sound like I'm from the US?

Question

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Answer 1

Good but there is room for improvement.

Here are some errors from that former post.

I'm a chinese!
You would say, "I'm Chinese."

The first reason I don’t like about this school is that the teachers are always late for class, and this is a private school!
You would say, "the first reason", not thing.

My mom and dad had paid a lot of money; we shouldn’t get treated this way!
Omit the word had.

The second reason I don’t like about this school is that our classmates are not doing their homework, and the teachers didn’t do anything about it!
Omit the word about.

Which means students are not afraid or respect teachers.
This instead of which, although some Americans with poor grammar will make that mistake so it doesn't sound foriegn.

When I was in my elementary school, the bathrooms aroma smells good.
Use possesive, bathroom's or omit the word aroma and use the past-tense smelled instead of smells.

They can fire me, what am I going to lose?
You can't get fired from school, only a job. You may be expelled from school.

So now I still listen to my ipod everyday, and my grade is still good.
If you are taking more than one class you should say grades.

LOL!The most terrible things about this school is the lunch.
You would say thing, not things.

Doesn't the school knows that eating those unhealthy food would become stupid? Doesn't the school knows that eating those fried things could easly get fat or worse, cancer?
This is so bad I'll just rewrite it.
Don't they know eating unhealthy things will make us stupid? Don't they know fried foods will make us fat and may cause cancer?
It still doesn't make much sense.

Good thing my mom is smart enough to made lunch for me.
Use make instead of made.

This is so rediculous!
Use a spellcheck - ridiculous.

Because this school suck!
Sucks, no American school kid screws up that one.

I supposed even Mr. Bean knows.
I suppose...

There are still a lot of reason that let me hate about this school, I just don't want to waste my time picking on this loser school.
There are still a lot of reasons I hate this school....

I've got something else better to do.
The usual phrase is, I've got better things to do.

And there is one thing else, if the school didn't make a diffrence (just like now), then I'm gonna quit next semester.
And there's something else (though I would omit this whole part). Again spellcheck - difference.

I don't have time for all this, it seems like my father and mother had throw their money into a stove.
You can say had thrown to make this correct grammar. Most Americans would just say they threw their money away.

This school was diorganized!
Diorganized isn't a word. I think you mean disorganized. Also you would say is not was.


All in all pretty good. I understood all you said. Just work on your grammar. Hope that helps and good luck with your English.

Answer 2

No, definitely not. Most 7th grade American students would LOVE it if they didn't have to do homework, but you seem very distraught over the idea (which is great--- I wish more Americans were like you)

Answer 3

Wow, find a new school, your going nowhere there, sounds more like a reform school, uggahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

Answer 4

Uhh...i think so...a lil bit... but the forth is not spelled that way...it is FOURTH... forth is different from fourth.
About your so called your 'diary', you should transfer from other school though so that you are not complaining like that...

Answer 5

sure do honey