I saw him that day.
He stood staring out the window
Face pressed against the pane.
I stood there wishing he would say my name.
But alas he was looking at her
And she was perfect
A beauty without compare
I could only stand, wait, and let my heart tear
He was an angel
She was a demon hidden behind perfect blue eyes
Me, I am just a girl
I am weak to him with my heavy sighs
He looks to me for advice about the demon girl
I cannot give him any in my despair
He tells me to leave
And I do without telling him the feelings that I had come to share.
I saw him again after that day.
She was with him, holding him like I should be
Being everything that should have been me
But I am not what he sees
She is a demon behind perfect blue eyes
He is an angel that I still dream of every night
I am just a girl that he does not see
But he is just blind, and someday he will wake up to me
2006-09-16 02:10:14 · 16 answers · asked by Anonymous in Games & Recreation ➔ Hobbies & Crafts
That was Great, that had to come from the heart.
2006-09-16 02:15:35 · answer #1 · answered by EL Big Ed 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The poem shows a lot of emotion and I like it. I really like the part, "she is a demon behind perfect blue eyes, he is an angel that I still dream of every night..." The only part that kind of made me cringe is the part where it says, "But alas..." (alas threw me off a little bit). Overall this poem is pretty well done.
2006-09-16 03:43:00 · answer #2 · answered by Shelly 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
deep from the heart,interesting but superfical everthing seems to be based on appearances, what about what's inside? a demon is a fallen angel.see what cannot be seen.grow beyond appearances. find someone better for inspiration.
2006-09-16 08:21:19 · answer #3 · answered by gabegm1 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice, but the rhyming scheme doesn't really do anything...
You're better off going freeform, I think.
GREAT JOB, though!!
2006-09-16 02:11:45 · answer #4 · answered by sarahg 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
that was great
you know that is just how I feel about a blue eyed deamon girl and a boy...
I loved it
2006-09-16 07:23:50 · answer #5 · answered by jello 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, l like it very much.Very realistic.
2006-09-16 02:34:48 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, l like it very much.Very realistic.
2006-09-16 02:17:05 · answer #7 · answered by catsclaw 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice you should keep writing more.
2006-09-16 06:05:00 · answer #8 · answered by Juniper 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very nice poem i like it a lot
2006-09-16 05:21:21 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
its horrible but states the piont
2006-09-17 02:40:31 · answer #10 · answered by offie 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋