Read this and then tell me what you think I am referring to in my Poem/Riddle.
A woman she is, full of mystique and surprises.
The body of she, compact and light. She freezes her victims for all of eternity.
Sucking a moment of life from her victims, but no more.
Inside her gray exterior sleek in design, lies a rolling ribbon like that of a rattle snakes coil
Sometimes her victims to others will appear blurred or washed out but at the moment of attack their fate has seemed sealed
2006-09-15 09:49:33 · 18 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Other - Entertainment
For those of you who guessed a camera your right good job i asked a couple of people i know and they could not guess correctly what it was so good job to those of you who guess correctly
2006-09-15 10:05:17 · update #1
a Camera
2006-09-15 09:52:39 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like you're describing a witch or a succubus (a female demon). Your visual descriptions are very good. There are a few awkward phrases like, "the body of she". Why not simply say "Her body"? The way I would put it: "Her body, compact and light, can freeze her victims for all eternity." (Leave out the "of") I would punctuate the last stanza differently: "Sometimes to others her victims will appear blurred or washed out. But at the moment of attack, their fates are sealed." Saying their fate has "seemed" sealed, is kind of weak. It either is or isn't, and in this powerful poem, it has to be more definitely sealed. Be sure to watch your possessives and the nouns in apposition; i.e. "Inside her gray exterior, sleek in design, lies a rolling ribbon like a rattle snake's coil." (Leave out "that of") With a bit of tweaking to make your lines more concise and to the point, you have an excellent poem.
2006-09-15 10:09:19 · answer #2 · answered by gldjns 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
a woman is she, but full of mystique and surprises, another may say that woman is he.
that body is compact but light it is unknown, for she holds her breath in, for what seems to be eternity...
sucking a moment of life but not of a victim, more like a client
for it is but her job, the new orleans whore...
inside her gay exterior sleek in design, lies a rainbow ribbon
she uses to bind...
her purr more like that of a rattle snake coil for the kitty in her has
been washed out and now blurred...
not this queen, she is new orleans and at this moment where her fate may seem sealed, that is when what is assumed is an
attack from her gifted field... pardon me, i had too. you can use it as your own, for it is. i am not an editor, but i've spent endless time in the edit room...
2006-09-15 10:18:18 · answer #3 · answered by lee f 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A exhilaration to verify. I merely offered a $one hundred fifty funds wrist watch yet because it really is kinetically self winding, if i do no longer positioned on it established, the flow runs down and the palms freeze.
2016-10-16 00:48:12 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Awesome.
I am sure there is an answer to this riddle, although it's over my head.
There's a lot of places you can go with this....song, short story, book. I hope you'll reveal the answer to the riddle for us.
2006-09-15 09:56:54 · answer #5 · answered by Elwood Blues 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I like it a lot, good job! (still scratching my head though, sounds like Medusa to me, either that or a camera)
2006-09-15 09:58:14 · answer #6 · answered by Oscar 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Nice poem. Please allow me to submit one of my own I wrote some time ago to someone VERY important to me:
"To know you is a pleasure.
To know you is a thrill.
I loved then, as I do now
And forever always will"
2006-09-15 10:00:04 · answer #7 · answered by Mike M. 7 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Non-digital camera maybe?
2006-09-15 09:57:54 · answer #8 · answered by Weasel 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think its kinda Gothic. And i dont like Gothic but that was still pretty cool!
2006-09-15 09:58:29 · answer #9 · answered by littlefeet_96 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Sounds good.
2006-09-15 09:52:07 · answer #10 · answered by ♥HeidiJustine♥ 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋