From this world, you are buried,
Buried not by soul,
But by a false soul,
Full of anger and rage,
Living up to a false name.
You are the leftovers in the trash,
You attract all the flies,
To eat away any of the love,
That you were blessed with on this earth,
The earth that that love never saw.
Love is blind and lays deep inside,
Hate lives on our face,
Hate is the plaque that grows on you,
When you forget what's good inside,
Hate is what no man is born with.
Death kills what is inside you,
Passing every act
You performed, to mankind.
Death will not remember who you are,
Death remembers what you show.
2006-09-14 23:14:39 · 11 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
Sorry but little literary merit here.
Hate is the plaque that grows on you - that's awful.
Keep working on it. Read the great poets and discover why they are great.
2006-09-14 23:19:45 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that it has some excellent imagery to it. I can see the messages that you are portraying. Poetry is a very difficult thing to write - so keep it up.
2006-09-15 06:26:33 · answer #2 · answered by Shadowtwinchaos 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Cool, sounds like a nine inch nails song......
"Love is blind and lays deep inside"
I would change lays to lies;
2006-09-15 16:53:58 · answer #3 · answered by Stiletto ♥ 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
excellent in my view and lots of good thing in ur poem
nice infact v nice. i don't have words to explain how i like it
2006-09-15 06:17:51 · answer #4 · answered by akbar 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
excellent
2006-09-15 06:22:50 · answer #5 · answered by oh_yeah 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i realy like it and it has a lot of meaning.
2006-09-15 06:31:32 · answer #6 · answered by linda b 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it its good.
2006-09-15 06:23:24 · answer #7 · answered by cool k 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
into the death thing huh?
2006-09-15 06:23:29 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
good
2006-09-15 06:24:31 · answer #9 · answered by Mr. Truknit 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good
2006-09-15 06:16:40 · answer #10 · answered by Pauli :) 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋