Tell me what you think of this introduction paragraph for an essay on global warming. The 10 points will go to who I think is the most helpful. Constructive critisicm please.
Imagine a world just like “The Day After Tomorrow”. Tsunami’s taking over entire cities, earth quakes splitting apart roads, and hail the size of baseballs. Global warming is causing numerous radical changes in earth’s climate. These natural disasters may have a man-made cause but becoming pro-active can prevent a Hollywood movie from becoming reality.
2006-09-14 10:39:21 · 3 answers · asked by x64impalassx 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Imagine a world just like the film, “The Day After Tomorrow”, with Tsunami’s engulfing entire cities, earthquakes splitting the land apart , and hailstones the size of baseballs. Global warming is causing numerous radical changes to Planet Earth’s climate. These natural disasters may have a man-made cause, but by becoming pro-active we can prevent a Hollywood movie from becoming a reality.
2006-09-14 10:44:27 · answer #1 · answered by Ahwell 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds good. Just change around the part where you say "earthquakes splitting apart roads" its not grammatically correct. Instead, use "earthquakes splitting roads apart" catch my drift? Other than that You had me hooked. = )
good luck
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2006-09-14 17:48:19 · answer #2 · answered by Niki 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good 9 through 10 BE MORE DESCIPTIVE
2006-09-14 17:41:58 · answer #3 · answered by Hottshot64 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋