Lonely Girl….Cries…
Walking down a lonely street
Tears running down my cheeks
They hit the ground
And all are round
Soon the rain from the sky
Are really all the tears I cry
And no body knows my pain
When they look at me in the rain
And I sit here alone
And always wonder
what I did so wrong
2006-09-14 02:42:15 · 24 answers · asked by DizzyChick15 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Other - Family & Relationships
Very nice!
2006-09-14 02:44:00 · answer #1 · answered by Sasha 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
r u sad? im sorry for u but u should get out and go do something go to the movies with a friend, go do somethin athletic, somethin to take ur mind off of it. NO DRUGS OR ANYTHING SUICIDLE. ONLY POSITVE THINGS THAT MAKE U HAPPY. forget about that guy and move on. enjoy life and live to the fullest. good luck. NICE POEM BY THE WAY.:)
2006-09-14 09:46:17 · answer #2 · answered by DUDE 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well I was eating a subway roll,
and I have to say it was great,
But half way through i sat and read this
and now my roll has to wait
So i can type this poetic answer
to which I hope you agree
Is the best here by far
And 10 points should go to me.
And now back to my roll! Your poem is good. But try and write a happy one to go with it.
2006-09-14 09:47:09 · answer #3 · answered by Rich W 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I said a prayer for you today
And know God must have heard-
I felt the answer in my heart
Although He spoke no word!
I didn't ask for wealth or fame
(I knew you wouldn't mind)-
I asked Him to send you treasures
Of a far more lasting kind!
I asked that He'd be near you
At the start of each new day
To grant you health and blessings
And my friendship to share your way!
I asked for happiness for you
In all things great and small-
But it was for His loving care
I prayed the most of all!
By: Kenny P. aka-Cobra
2006-09-14 09:45:20 · answer #4 · answered by Cobra 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
go to poetry.com, and enter your poem, you could have it published in a book, or win like 10, 000 dollars. i have been doing to since i was 13, and i have had my poetry in like 15 books, and even got an offer from nobel house publishing. people say that it is a gimck, but at least you get your poems out there
2006-09-14 10:22:36 · answer #5 · answered by shenae 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
im way to honest it has a good message but no soal. it dosnt flow when you read it dosnt flow from the heart you stumble in many places you need some work but it is good. dont hold back let it flow from the heart. send me a new poem from the heart try to get it to flow well if you want to you can send me a new one sorry about the constructive critisism
2006-09-14 09:48:04 · answer #6 · answered by unkown 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, I like it DizzyChic! There's little else I can say except it makes me rather sad for you.
P.S. I suggest that you abandon this 'text-message' shorthand. Surely it's not too much effort to write 'any' instead of 'Ne' ?
2006-09-14 09:49:18 · answer #7 · answered by clausiusminkowski 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The 5th and 6 th lines make me want to plagiarise.
2006-09-14 09:46:35 · answer #8 · answered by tyreanpurple 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great poem, hope to hear more from you. Are you relating this to real life situations?
2006-09-14 09:43:35 · answer #9 · answered by Henry_Tee 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Nice job wtggggggggggg :)
2006-09-14 09:48:11 · answer #10 · answered by ridingthestorm_out 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋