Aspiration poet sez wot do u think??

Question

The Writer

The writer sits in her chair
Staring into space
Waiting for inspiration.
Waiting for the spark
When she starts her hand is blurred
She pores her thoughts onto the page
She writes a poem of love and hate
She writes a poem of tragedy
She writes the poem of her life
When she's finished she cries for a while
Then she burns the poem
With the memories so painfull
So no one will see that poem
No one will ever feel her pain

Answer 1

kudos for putting your poetry out there. i understand what your saying; but it needs a little work. poetry is complete emotion not taking the time to conform to words. the emotion is there, but it sounds to packaged. try to speak through a stream of consciousness; impulses. it might sound better and be more interesting, more real.

Answer 2

Why did you intentionally distort the language in your "banner" question?

The poem is banal.

Answer 3

grammar and syntax as well as spelling needs work. You realize you only have two sentances in this thing.

nice theme though.

Answer 4

hmmm, no real structure or "feel" to it, plus spelling.... aspiring, pours, painful.

but not bad i suppose!