Would this count as a peom?

Question

I know it's really pussy to write them but I really wanted to. For some reason I couldn't speak and whatever was on my mind came to the paper:

I want freedom
I want to define myself
I grow tired of living in your shadow
and I grow tired of being your prisoner
I am not your animal
You cannot keep me in your cage
These shackles you have placed on my wrsits should not be here
Give me a voice so I may speak
Give me a will so I may act
My time slowley aproches
When time runs out your shadow will leave
When time runs out my soul will be free
You cannot keep a personality a hostage
You cannot create another you out of me
Look down on me for not being you
Never look down on me for being myslef
Someday when your mind is open and your body is old
You will see your the mistake
and I was the correction.

Yeah it doesn't rhyme but It feels like it is a peom. Don't make fun of it but I would like opinions.

Answer 1

Wow! Did you write this?
It sounds like a young person struggling to become independent of a controlling parent. A parent who expects them to be like the parent, and doesn't see the child for who they themselves are inside.
Definitely a poem, which doesn't have to rhyme at all anyway.
Very moving and thought-provoking.
You've done well.

Answer 2

Poems don't have to rhyme. I think it is very good actually(watch the spelling though). I have written some songs(nothing big time or published/etc) but one won a first place amateur lyric award years ago. I also once met a lady who asked me to read some poems she had written, turned out that she was writing song material too. She moved someplace in CO and was writing songs with a partner the last time I heard from her. My big thing here with what you have written is the emotion, there seems to be a lot of pain wrapped up in this poem. Some of my songs had a lot of that quality in them too. You can let a lot of that pain out by writing whether or not you let anyone else see them since it still helps to get it out and face it. By writing things out it helps you see things better. No one should control another person. I wish you luck, I hope you will continue to write and don't let anyone else hold you down. Hubby held me down for years, finally I stood up and although life is not perfect it's a whole lot different and better now. Good luck, S.L.

Answer 3

This is a poem. A poem does not have to rhyme. This is very passionate and from the heart and inner soul. I encourage you to continue writing, share your work, it is profound and can make a difference to those whom read it.

Thank you for sharing.

Answer 4

A poem doesn't have to rhyme. So keep it up. As long as what you write has a meaning.

Answer 5

Yes it is, and a pretty good one at that.

Goof for you for expressing your feelings in a creative way. Alot of people don't take the time to give their feelings words!

Answer 6

I guess do, but i don't know anything about poem. I thik you have to ask the expert to know for sure.

Answer 7

Sure it does. But i am not an expert. This link may help you in deciding.

Answer 8

yes its a poem and a good one to you can really tell its from your heart and its well said

Answer 9

i think it would. i think its pretty cool like very good actually..hey if you luv music you can turn it into a song! LOL! thats what i would do if i were you.

Answer 10

Yes, it is a good poem.
maybe not Nobel prize winning,
but I know where you are coming from...
been there, seen that...
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