Enchantment
What wind of earth blows over your face,
Where is the outline of your shadow,
Will we ever be in the same place,
I can not tell for I do not know,
For when I look into your perfect eyes,
I stare at your picture within the frame,
Then my heart dreams and sighs,
Because I only know your name,
Yet I have seen you from afar,
Even though your deep inside my heart,
I wonder where on earth you are,
And how long will we be apart,
Can you hear the bird sing in the tree,
Or feel the autumn wind blow,
And do you feel the words from me,
The feeling of love you know,
Do my words carry you away,
Across the clouds in the sky so blue,
And does my love drift you away,
With thoughts of how I love you?
2006-09-13 12:54:22 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
I have to give you credit for that outstanding poem. Especially the ending it is impeccable.
You appear to be very good with words.
You have a unique gift of writing. Are you a poet/writer? I love the arts and literature, and i appreciate people who are creative with words.
2006-09-13 13:21:39 · answer #1 · answered by kerri 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Beautiful sentiment! I'd edit a little: you're deep inside my heart, instead of your; change 'of earth' to adjective; and 'so blue' adjective of the type of blue; 'this' frame instead of 'the' frame would be more personal; 'fall's instead of 'is' the outline of your shadow.
2006-09-13 13:12:11 · answer #2 · answered by ma8pi 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good poem, but I don't know if I would be posting my original work here online. Anyone could steal it and commit plagiarism.
You should go to a poetry website like poetry.com or something and find a way to get your writing into print! You have talent. But protect your original work!
2006-09-13 13:13:00 · answer #3 · answered by Andrea S 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really, these verses are charming! Words of a true gotten passionate poet! Who knows you does not find this love? Or already it found? If already it found, it is a true and sincere love! Without words to explain!
2006-09-13 13:05:56 · answer #4 · answered by Luan 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
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2006-09-13 13:03:24 · answer #5 · answered by P Bug<3 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I love it!!!!!!
I love reading poetry and this was really good. i got goosebumps!
2006-09-13 12:58:30 · answer #6 · answered by blessedofmortals17 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
THAT I LIKE YOUR POEM BUT DID YOU GO-TOO COLLAGE FOR IT
2006-09-13 12:57:49 · answer #7 · answered by sticks 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
very empressive
2006-09-13 12:57:44 · answer #8 · answered by ***** K K ***** 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋