When people lie and people cheat,
I know I'm free to go,
To find the God inside of me,
The only God I know.
Finding God's impossible,
In this huge human race,
But when my God is inside me,
I always will have faith.
Through life I've always wondered,
What it's like just to be me,
With a book to follow, I'm so locked up,
With my soul I'm free.
Some men find love from others,
Some find love from Cocaine,
But these things go in people's live's
My love will stay the same.
2006-09-13 09:18:58 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Other - Arts & Humanities
It's alright.
2006-09-13 09:27:21 · answer #1 · answered by Sirius Black 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it. I'm hoping you are talking about the one true God, because so many people just casually use the word God. I'd change Cocaine to pain instead because so many think love is pain i.e. abusive relationships, drugs, anything that is a substitute of love you could replace with the word pain. and the part "But these things go in people's lives"....maybe so "go on in" and change "live's" to "lives". Hope that helps! :)
2006-09-13 09:29:30 · answer #2 · answered by Mel 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thats a great poem, this is my fav part.....
"Some men find love from others,
Some find love from Cocaine,
But these things go in people's live's
My love will stay the same."
2006-09-13 09:27:22 · answer #3 · answered by lala 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think your poem is very beautiful especially because your not specifying it to a specific religion it's whats inside of you your heart and soul that matters. but what do you mean with a book your so locked up??
2006-09-13 09:24:08 · answer #4 · answered by ? 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
why do you say Through life I've always wondered,
What it's like just to be me,
With a book to follow, i don't get that part , but anyways your poem is ok
2006-09-13 09:33:05 · answer #5 · answered by jojo 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Poem about God + allusion to cocaine = cool
2006-09-13 09:25:08 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
i think its good, maybe u could turn it into a song and get rid of the word cocaine
2006-09-13 09:29:32 · answer #7 · answered by Bdazzeling 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad. I don't think the meaning of the next-to-last line is clear, though, & maybe should be reconsidered.
2006-09-13 09:23:37 · answer #8 · answered by yahoohoo 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i dont like the line about cocaine but the rest is very christian like!!!!!!!!
2006-09-13 09:21:46 · answer #9 · answered by MusicFanatic101 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thumbs Up!!
I just wonder if it should be........
What it's like to just be me,
instead of ..... What it's like just to be me,
2006-09-13 09:48:42 · answer #10 · answered by More Lies & More Smoke Screens 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋