Need help on World History essay please?

Question

Hi, I have to write this essay about the long term effects of the vietnam war on vietnam and the US.
I wrote the essay and everything but i think my thesis could be better. Heres what i wrote:
The Vietnam war affected both the United Staes and Vietnam socially, economically and also in terms of politics over a long period of time.
Im quite new to writing thesis statements so im not too good. Can anyone help me improve this thesis? but it needs to involve social, economic and political affects coz thats what i wrote about.
Thanks

unfortunately yes i have to hand it in tomorrow.... but im done and my thesis statement fits in perfectly well, but i just thought like the wording and the way its written could be improved.

Wow thanks a lot guys! Yep i wrote about cambodia but i guess i can still add some stuff to that. Great!! =D

Answer 1

It affected Vietnam by delaying them figuring out for themselves that Communism doesn't work. We should have let them try it rather than dictate how they would run their country. It also affected Cambodia, don't forget. Our illegal bombing of them caused the farmers to abandon their fields, and led an agriculturally self-sufficient society to famine. In the resulting chaos, the Khmer Rouge took over, and initiated an insane blood bath that killed at least 1/4 of the population: all the educated people were targeted. They wanted a population of ignorant peasants to rule.

It affected America by undermining trust in government. It expanded the National Debt. It polarized American society, by inspiring a deep and lasting resentment of Liberals. It also undermined our reputation in the world.

Answer 2

I think you have a really good start.
The only real way you could improve your thesis statement to to state HOW the US and Vietnam were affected. Meaning-- use some adjectives. You only need to add three or four more words and you are good to go in terms of getting your essay started.
One things I found alot was once I wrote my essay, I ended up changing my thesis statement a bit to better refect what I wrote. (Not sure if this class will allow you to do that).

On a side note that might help you, I was a little girl when the last of the American troops came home in the 70's. I remember my dad yelling at the TV and saying something like-- "Its about time!" I was born because my dad got a draft notice and my parents decided to have me to keep getting him deferred. Otherwise, they would have started their family in a couple of years. (I was born in 1967). I also know that many, many people in my parents' generation stayed in school to keep that deferrment and got PhD's-- and ended up being the most educated generation in history.

Good luck on your thesis--sounds like you will do great on your essay!

Answer 3

You need to specify what affects these are (at a high level) that you will discuss during the paper.

Remember the tell em what you are gonna tell em, Tell them, Tell them what you told them? A thesis statement is the: Tell them what you are gonna tell them. Only it makes a statement that you will further prove and discuss through the paper.

Instead of "affected them economically" you might specifically say " was the impetus for rising inflation, housing shortages and increased rates of unemplyment that affected the country's economy for many years".

Use whatever those things are that you further discuss in your paper and reference them directly in your thesis statement.

Answer 4

I hope you don't have to turn in your project tomorrow. I was in Vietnam for 7 years and can give many insights into the social, economic and political problems from the Vietnamese side of the war...I wasn't in the States so I don't know about that....if you message me....I will answer whatever you want to know...

Answer 5

you have to have a thesis to develop a thesis statement. if you know nothing about the subject you have a long row to hoe.

Answer 6

Write about the tensions and differences in culture and more so, etiquette.