do you think my introduction is good enough?

Question

theme: Merging Ideas and Experiences…
Exceeding Excellence!
Over the past years of my existence, it was always my vision to be a success. To excel in everything that I do. But what does it take to be exceptional? The pursuit of excellence is not to a quest for superiority, and is not about competing with your fellowmen or about outdoing the works of others. It is not done for one's own glory and honor. Perfection concerns not whether man is perfect, but whether he should be. And if he should be, then how is this to be attained? Success means being the best. Excellence means being your best. Success means being better than everyone else. Excellence means being better tomorrow than you were yesterday. Success means exceeding the achievements of other people. Excellence means harmonizing your practice with your potential.
**i kind of got some words from other works..** help need badly!..** it's for a 3minute oratorical speech and that's all ive got! so far. (english class)

Man’s desire for excellence pushes a soldier to carry on his combat. A captain to continue his expedition. A racer to run one more mile. Man’s desire for excellence pushes man to surpass his limits.

how can i relate this to science? it;s supposed to be for our science month oration thing at school..

Answer 1

just give up and sleep with the teacher lolol

Answer 2

Since this has to do with science I'd work it in with some our great scientific achievments.
Some might be - polio vaccine, landing on the moon, the internet.

Until I got to the details part I had no idea what you were talking about and it sounds a little rhetorical to me. 3 minutes is an awful lot. Are you really going to get penalized if you come up short? Better one minute of solid content than 3 minutes of pointless rambling. Good luck.

Answer 3

I think you are doing a great Job!
Maybe now you can say how to be excellet without wanting success