does anyone like this poem?

Question

then you fall
dark soft clouds cover the sky, blue,black orange and white. you tell me not now and i tell you dont lie, when you step in your grave and die. you hate counsiling and you skip down the hall,and they always catch you when you fall. you break down and want to fall down and kill your mother, and you sit there ignoring your dumbass brother. you kick the wall and scream so loud, you are mad thats no doubt. you walk across the graveyard and bury a hole and mark your name, when someone is in trouble your the one to blame. your the last one in the earth and dont exist, you feel so good in the dark dusty mist. then you fall.

Answer 1

I actually did not like it when I first started reading it. However, as I continued on, I could actually relate to it. By the end, you had me.... it is actually a good poem. Don't stop writing now. But you sound depressed and sad... hope you get some happiness in your life and I wish you the best. Sounds like you deserve a break.

Answer 2

I liked it, it would have been easier to read in a different format. I understand what you are talking about which is good. You should maybe have found a synonym for the word fall in some places due to the fact you overly used that word other than that pretty good job. Keep it up poetry is a good way to relieve stress and show your emotions.

Answer 3

Its OK, the poem gets deep and soulfoul and the beginning is cheesy and corny and isn't worthy of the good work you did below it. Dark-soft has to go

Answer 4

It's good. Did you write it?

Answer 5

did you write it?

its good.

Answer 6

nice

Answer 7

i like it! did you write it?