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Question

History of the English Language

Did you know that there are about 700 million English speakers, but only 750,000 words? The English language is globally spoken which means that it is a global language. The English language is spoken world wide by all different races. The English language has 750,000 words but 200,000 of them are common everyday words. The English language has the most everyday words, for ex. German has 184,000, and French has about 100,000. The English language came from different language but the ones that will be talked about are Anglo-Saxon, French, and Renaissance Latin.

People rediscovered all things classical such as: Latin and Greek languages, art, music, and architecture. This Time was called the renaissance. Latin Based languages were and still are called romance languages. The Latin words in English include the parts of speech such as: noun, verb, adjective, and adverb. The Greek words include: literary devises such as: smile, metaphor. Other words describe literature to include: poetry, comedy, drama, and tragedy.

English arose as a major language in the middle of the fifth century at about A.D. 827. At this time it was called Englisc. The people that spoke it were the Anglo-Saxon’s and the Jutes and their king, King Egbert. Anglo-Saxon is also called old English. This make Anglo-Saxon the parent of English. The old English language is very difficult to learn, our most common words do come from these though such as, wife, child, brother, sister, and fight.


When the Normans invaded the English Channel it was easy for them to take over since it was only 25 miles across. These invaders came from Normandy, France and brought the French language and costumes with them. These people made the Anglo-Saxons except William the conqueror as their new king and they beat them and the Danes in the battle of Hastings. When the French and Anglo-Saxon languages were mixed it became what today is called Middle English. Examples of this are Sir, dine, honor, and roast.
English is now a global language Anglo-Saxon is the foundation of the English language but it is also considered easy to learn by the Spanish, Italian, French, and Portuguese people. English is considered a hospitable and democratic language because it accepts words from other countries and cultures, which makes it multicultural. The English language is packed with many words from faraway sources. Wherever you go around the world someone speaks English. More than 10,000 new words are added to the dictionary each year. In conclusion the English language has come a long way from when it first began.

i wanted to let ya'll know that this is an 8th grade essay so i really need good tips cus this is like 50% of my grade this trimester

Answer 1

Don't start so many sentences with "The English language..." You may not want to open with a question. It is usually frowned upon if you say "in conclusion," especially in the very last sentence. You spelled "simile" wrong and have a couple words capitalized that shouldn't be in the second paragraph. You shouldn't abbreviate "example" as "ex." in the first paragraph. In the third paragraph, and maybe other places, the plural of "Anglo-Saxons" should not have an apostrophe. Cite your sources. Good content though.

Answer 2

I'm a teacher and these are my suggestions... hope this helps!

Did you know that there are about 700 million English speakers, but only 750,000 words? The English language is all over the world which makes it a global language. Of the 750,000 English words, only 200,000 of them are common everyday words, which is more than most other languages. For example, in German there are only 184,000 common words, and French has about 100,000.

The English language developed from several different languages, but the most prominent are Anglo-Saxon, French, and Renaissance Latin.

After the Middle Ages, between the 14th and 16th centuries, people rediscovered all things classical such as: Latin and Greek languages, art, music, and architecture. This era was called the Renaissance. Latin-based languages were, and still are called romantic languages. The Latin words in English include the parts of speech such as: noun, verb, adjective, and adverb. The Greek words include: literary devises such as: smile, metaphor. Other words describe literature to include: poetry, comedy, drama, and tragedy. [** where did this last set of words come from? Greek? you need to explain this**]

English arose as a major language in the middle of the fifth century at about A.D. 827. At this time it was called Englisc. The people that spoke it were the Anglo-Saxon’s and the Jutes and their king, King Egbert. Anglo-Saxon is also called old English. This makes Anglo-Saxon the parent of English. Though old English is very difficult to understand today, some of our most common words came from old English such as, wife, child, brother, sister, and fight.


When the Normans invaded the English Channel it was easy for them to take over since it was only 25 miles across. These invaders came from Normandy, France and brought the French language and costumes with them. These people made the Anglo-Saxons accept William the Conqueror as their new king and they beat them and the Danes in the battle of Hastings. When the French and Anglo-Saxon languages were mixed it became what today is called Middle English. Examples of this are Sir, dine, honor, and roast.

During the last two centuries, English has become a global language. Due to its Latin roots, English is considered easy to learn by the Spanish, Italian, French, and Portuguese people. English is considered to be a hospitable and democratic language because it accepts words from other countries and cultures, which makes it multicultural. The English language is packed with many words from faraway sources. Wherever you go around the world someone speaks English. More than 10,000 new words are added to the dictionary each year. In conclusion the English language has come a long way from when it first began.

Answer 3

I went in order from the beginning of the essay.
1. the opening sentence is good as a question (in opposition to what someone above me said), because it catches the reader's attention
2. Worldwide is one word, not two
3. Actually type out the word example instead of using [ex.]
4. Time should not be capitalized in the context that you are using it
5. You don't need any of the colons that you used in the second paragraphs. While you are listing things, your sentences flow just fine without the colons.
6. When speaking of a year, you say "in", not "at"
7. Anglo-Saxons is a plural, not a possessive noun, so you don't need an apostrophe
8. In the third paragraph, last sentence, I would move the "though" to the beginning of the sentence.

Answer 4

Fine just check the third paragraph you have spelt English wrong
Use spell check. Well done

Answer 5

Where are your sources??.. Try changing the opening to a statement rather than a question.

Answer 6

Wow u wrote that that is awsome great job my oppinon A+

Answer 7

it sounds fine