i was trying to accomplish something that made you think but was catchy at the same time did i get it? ( i know i'm 2 bars shy of a full verse but before i continiue i needed an opinon)
full circle soilders we ready for war on the front like /
show you your sh*t was outta like like we done ****** up your spine, with scoliosis//
i'm sicker than a house infested with roaches/
and kamakazie lyrics at any one who approach this//
notice a line around the corner of folks who wanna test/
all we do is step outside and call out who's next//
who want step to the champ like its 106 and park in here/
lyrics that dont stop like a car wit faulty parking gear//
and you in parking gear cuz you dont move sh*t/
i mean i push rap so well i gotta push bricks//
lyrical bullets so hard that you know they gon hit/
lyrical hollow tips spark like chewing on lifesavers/
not cocky but imma prophecy raps life saver//
2006-09-09 17:22:32 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music
would it help if i changed some of the "lyrics" or "lyrical"'s to other words like flow , rhymes ect?
2006-09-09 17:29:09 · update #1
yahoo didnt blank out "******" but it was going to black out "sh*t " but i want it there
2006-09-09 17:30:01 · update #2
I like the push rap push bricks line...
In all honesty though there's too many lyrics about lyrics.
It's like watching television shows that are about other television shows...
2006-09-09 17:26:44 · answer #1 · answered by Andy J 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I think it would sound good as a rap song. I enjoy Rap, that's all I listen to. I never understand what they are saying half the time, so my opinion probably doesn't help. I like the push bricks line. I don't however like the scoliosis part. Are you rapping about war or about rapping. it seems like you are just rhyming words. But like I said I don't know much about Rap, I just know it sounds good.
2006-09-09 17:35:14 · answer #2 · answered by Prissy_kitty 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Personally I don't go for that type of music. However I see no difference in what you have written verses any of the other rappers. If you like it then go for it. Remember that everyone is entitled to there taste and some like those songs. So you could get rich!
2006-09-09 17:32:30 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a really good rap. Last line came off a bit odd. Good internal rhyme, nice natural beat to it and good attitude. Go ahead and record it man, you never know who will pick it up.
2006-09-09 17:30:11 · answer #4 · answered by Don M 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i don't be attentive to the track yet its ok. the choose for of words are sturdy by using fact they are what we call 'notice pictures'. they provide psychological pictures. taylor quick songs are very sturdy at those issues. score it from a million-10. 6/10. you do no longer would desire to place too a lot lyrics on songs. merely choose for the essence of it. it extremely is like sculpting. first you have a huge block of marble. then you definately do away with and do away with and do away with till what remains is a appropriate piece of artwork. however, do no longer delete the areas completely, it would provide you recommendations on destiny songs. it extremely is chanced on that easy format is common and candy to hearken to. intro >verse> prechorus>refrain> verse2> prechours>refrain> bridge> refrain> prechorus>refrain> outro you do no longer would desire to prechours after bridge. in case you decide on you could desire to. yet is advise you don;t. :D
2016-09-30 13:00:20 · answer #5 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its koo im somewhat feeling it out of 10 ill give it a 7
2006-09-09 17:29:18 · answer #6 · answered by baby_platinum2002 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
These lyrics don't make any sense.Can't you write something that
people can understand?It really is a waste of time reading them.
2006-09-09 17:27:31 · answer #7 · answered by mitchegen 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
It's really good! Keep going with what your doing! It's great!
2006-09-09 17:28:19 · answer #8 · answered by Priscilla 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
pretty good, but why would you blank out the work sh*t, but print "******"?
2006-09-09 17:28:19 · answer #9 · answered by stacy j 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its good. =]
I like it.
Some of it is hilarious, too.
Roll wit it. haha. =]
2006-09-09 17:24:53 · answer #10 · answered by taylor ray. 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋