Grammar problems? Can yu help me fix them if there are any?

Question

"...It was a two story like every other house in the neighborhood though, it seemed, much scarier looking. Every window was cracked and unclean; the light coming from them casting eerie shadows from the dead and lifeless trees onto the grass. The house it self looked rather old. It looked as though no one had lived in it for years, and yet warm light was forcing its way through the dusty windows......"

Answer 1

You have a number of gramatical problems here.

" .. the neighborhood, though, it seemed much scarier looking."

You should use a colon after unclean not a semi-colon.

Saying Dead and Lifeless is redundant. If its dead its definitly lifeless - - thats the definition of dead.

Itself is one word. You use the word Looked twice right in a row.

You put a coma to link no one living in the house for years and warm light going through the windows but they really aren't related and should be seperated.

use a thesaurus and find different words for Dusty, dead, cracked etc.

Answer 2

"... It was two stories like every other house in the neighborhood though it looked so much scarier. Every window was cracked and unclean. The light seeped through them cast eerie shadows from the dead, lifeless trees onto the grass. The house itself looked rather old as if no one had lived in it for years, yet warm light forced it way through its dusty windows..."

Answer 3

It was a two storeys building like every other houses in the neighbourhood, though it seemed much scarier. Every window was cracked and uncleaned/ dirty; the light coming from it casting eerie shadows from the dead and lifeless trees on the grass. the house itself looked rather old as though no one had lived in for years, yet the warm light was forcing it way through the dusty windows

Answer 4

"...It was double-storied like every other house in the neighbourhood although, it seemed alot scarier looking, then the rest. Every window pane was broken or dirty; the light coming through them cast eerie shadows of the dead and lifeless trees onto the grass. The house itself looked rather old, as though no one had lived there for years, yet warm light was forcing its way through the dirty,broken windows....."

Answer 5

The semicolon is wrong--use a comma. Since you say "the light coming from THEM...", it might be better to begin the sentence, "All of the windows were..."
"Itself" is one word.

Answer 6

Third sentence: The house ITSELF looked rather old.

Answer 7

it self should be itself

and yet ... either lose the and or the yet ... it's redundant to stick two conjunctions together. (in this case, i'd ditch the 'and' since you're juxtaposing the unlived in look with the warm light.)

Answer 8

You should specify if it is in American English, Australian, or UK English. That will effect the spelling greatly.

In America - neighborhood; in UK - neighbourhood...I think

Answer 9

it self should just be one word......itself.