the story of the horrible things that gon on at school.
bullying, dicrimination, violence.
this is the story of Danny Goodman a 16 year highs school student who lives i an old apartment without anybody just behimself after his mom was sent to hospital fior crazy people, his dad meanwhile is in jail. Danny has only one arm, his family were once irefugees who ran away from world war 2, danny was born with one arm, meanwhile since then danny and family have lived in new york for 20 years. Then tragedy struck.
so after his parents were gone danny was forced to find his own place. danny lives in bad conditons and does not eat well only at school, meanw hile at aschool danny is a bright student who dreams of going to college, his school work is find but danny has no friends at all because he has one arm. one day when walking home some bullies come and beat him up, danny is so lonely he celebrates his birhtday by sticking a candle on the table and blowing it out, to be continued..........
2006-09-08 04:54:40 · 8 answers · asked by garnessilva 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
Actually the idea shows great maturity on your part. I think it could be a very heartfelt and inspiring story.
As a story idea I give it a 7 so far.
But you must work on execution. You can not post something without making it as perfect as you can manage first. So make sure you fix all the grammer mistakes first next time.
Good luck with your story.
2006-09-08 07:35:37 · answer #1 · answered by sp_isme 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Wow, from the beginning this sounds like an incredibly depressing plot line. Is college a realistic goal for Danny? Does he have anyone to talk to or is he wandering through this story completely alone? Is there anything that makes him happy?
If a story seems too hopeless, you will lose your readers. Most people do not read to be completely depressed by the content, and they will want to feel like there is still hope for Danny and what he is doing.
My other recommendation on this is the same as on your other question-- plot is not 100% of what makes a story. Work on your writing style and really develop those characters. The way your wrote out the question makes it difficult to read. You should try to express yourself a little more clearly so readers can follow more easily.
2006-09-08 05:01:32 · answer #2 · answered by Obi_San 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If "...Danny and his family have lived in New York for 20 years...", how can Danny be only 16 years old?
2006-09-08 05:03:19 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a good topic to write on, though I wouldn't keep refurring to the fact that he has only one arm. I give it a 4 or 5 out of 10. Also, check for spelling errors. I'm not being mean, just stating to help. ^_~
2006-09-08 05:05:58 · answer #4 · answered by Taijiya Mizu 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
hmmm...somewhere between a 4 to a 6....
2006-09-08 10:47:29 · answer #5 · answered by alex wolfgang black 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you get a big 0
2006-09-08 05:00:05 · answer #6 · answered by EL Big Ed 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
4.5
2006-09-08 05:00:26 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
2 pts please
2006-09-08 19:24:53 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋