I am extremely interested in a position with (Cellphone company). In my spare time I have always taken a great interest in computers and electronics, including cellular phones and I believe a position with your company would be an excellent match of professionalism and personal interest. I also look forward to meeting new people and creating a positive work environment.
I believe I have qualities and abilities this company would surely benefit from. I feel that an intricate knowledge and familiarity of each and every product is essential to success. I believe that ignorance never sold a product and that customers are most comfortable buying from someone that knows their product well and can explain it accurately. I have many years of computer experience and have become very resourceful in finding information about any product.
In my years of education I have studied many relevant courses such as advanced statistics and algebra, accounting and computer science which all would
2006-09-07 23:29:55 · 11 answers · asked by Hailfire 1 in Business & Finance ➔ Careers & Employment
lend well to any aspect of this position. My familiarity with computers and ability to type 100 words per minute would suit any clerical duties required. In my time with past companies I have had many opportunities to interact with customers and learn how to handle any situation appropriately.
I am available to start any date after 9/13/06 and am very flexible. Please feel free to call (number) at any time and leave a message if I am unable to answer, or e-mail (address). I look forward to the opportunity of working with Sprint, and appreciate your time and consideration.
2006-09-07 23:30:27 · update #1
musiclicker, this is the cover letter, not the actual resume. sorry, you/your wife are idiots.
2006-09-07 23:47:05 · update #2
If I were you, I would either learn how to do a professional resume, or find someone that knows how to do one properly. Go to the library and get some books on the subject, and learn just what, and how to put information on the resume. My wife is a human resources manager for a fortune 500 company, and she looked at your resume, and said it was the worst she had saw in years. You talked about what an asset you would be, but nowhere did you back that up with experience or details about your educational background. Did you know, there is a form that one must follow when doing a resume? When looking at the do's and don'ts, you are all on the don't side! An employer can tell everything about you by looking at your resume. You get one chance to do it right. Are you sure this is what you want to send to a personnel manager? From the way you did yours, I would think you talk too much, are hung up on yourself, and basically not a good candidate to hire. Good Luck!
2006-09-07 23:45:23 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
two short paragraphs would do nicely. Add your one page resume (only put those that deal with the kind of business you're looking to work in, and be honest and don't embellish) and place on it which job title you are seeking and describe it. Then go on to say how you are already experienced in doing that.
It's not about what you want to do, it's about what you're qualified to do, what your educational background is, what employment along these lines you've done in the past and how successful you were at it, and provable references.
Remember that for each job you apply to there are 1500 other people applying too. They will probably have 2 interviews.
Usually a person finds a job if a job has been placed in a newspaper, with an agency, online, or you hear one is available. Never send your resume if you don't know of a job opening. You can call the company's Human Resources Department and ask for the url of job postings or where you can get that info, and ask if there is an online application. (sometimes a picture will get you the job because you look professional or presentable and they want someone to be among the public; or if you know someone in the company whose name you could use for reference to pull you in might be helpful...be sure to ask them first if you can use their name, and, be sure they will praise you and that they know which job you are applying for.)
2006-09-07 23:44:32 · answer #2 · answered by sophieb 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Your cover letter should be an introduction to your enclosed resume, not replace it. Keep it simple! Here is my resume, here is the reason that I know that I am a match, and ask for the job. The rest is very nice but isn't selling you. It's a cover sheet not a transcript of your interview. You will have nothing left to say in person if you write it all in your cover letter.
2006-09-07 23:43:46 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's excellent. Does it fit on one sheet of paper? My only slight criticism would be that it's possibly a little too long. However, you did a great job of working together your personal interests with your job skills, you gave examples of specific skills you have which would make you a good candidate for the job, and you mentioned your education. I'd at least call you for an interview based on that letter. Good luck!
2006-09-07 23:38:31 · answer #4 · answered by pvpd73127 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good, but too long. I would remove the paragraph that starts with "In my years of education", and reword the last paragraph. Maybe something like.....
I am very interested in working at (company), and I would welcome the opportunity to discuss my qualifications, as well as your needs and expectations, in further detail. I may be reached at (phone) or (email address).
Thank you for your time and consideration, and I look forward to speaking to you.
2006-09-08 01:55:14 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's actually very good...and I've read hundreds of excellent and piss-poor cover letters.
I just wish it wasn't going to Sprint. I have Nextel (personal and business) and the technical and customer service has become ATROCIOUS ever since Sprint got their hands on it. I'm pulling out as soon as I get a chance!
2006-09-07 23:39:29 · answer #6 · answered by 4999_Basque 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Too many "I"s and too many "ands". You lost me at the 2nd paragraph!
1st paragraph alone has:
"I am"
"I have"
"I believe"
"I also"
This should be a cover letter - not a second or expanded resume. Focus on no more than three qualifications that were advertised or your best three if this is an unsolicited resume.
Keep it simple - don't lose your audience.
You lost me.
2006-09-08 02:08:21 · answer #7 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Perfect, not only does it sumarize your skills and capabilities, but also your creative side. You need to remember that most people state that they are creative, you have managed to get the eye of an employer resulting to him to curiously want to take a look at your CV. Keep it up
2006-09-07 23:41:31 · answer #8 · answered by ngina 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is lengthy. You have mentioned about your interest in computers more than needed. Since you have stated all u have, u can skip the line ' I believe i have qualities and abiltities....'.
Good Luck
2006-09-07 23:40:25 · answer #9 · answered by Lady Luck 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its good but to long as a manager i would only read half way. before i lost interest!
shorten it a little.
2006-09-07 23:36:49 · answer #10 · answered by daniel j 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋