This is my homework for English Class and
I'm not sure about my grammar.
please correct my grammar.
Brian , who can be descirbed as an active and funny person is very functual. The group who reflects his personality best is Three Days Grace because they have a great deal of enthusiasm for music. His personality is one of things that is admired by others.
He is very funny and he is a very nice guy. What he likes about being in high school is to meet new people and learn a new stuff.
What he likes best about being in high school this year is to make new friends. He doesn't know where he'll be,and what he'll be doing in 20 years. He considers himself to be outgoing because he likes to hang out with his friends in his free time and talk to with his friends. He also considers himself to be cautious.
He acts very carefully in order to avoid possible danger.
He likes to p;ay sports very much.
2006-09-07 15:36:01 · 9 answers · asked by chadol4962 2 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Brian, who can be described as an active and funny person, is very purposeful. The group who reflects his personality best is Three Days Grace because they have a great deal of enthusiasm for music. His personality is one of things that are admired by others.
He is very funny and very nice. What he likes about being in high school is meeting new people and learning new things.
What he likes best about being in high school this year is the opportunity to make new friends. He does not know where he will be or what he will be doing in 20 years. He considers himself outgoing. He likes to hang out with and talk to his friends in his free time. He also considers himself cautious. He acts very carefully in order to avoid possible danger. He also enjoys sports a great deal.
2006-09-07 15:44:29 · answer #1 · answered by Sara 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Brian, who can be descirbed as an active and funny person, is very functual. Three Days Grace is the group that reflects his personality the best because they have a great deal of enthusiasm for music. His personality is admired by others. He is very funny and a nice guy. What he likes most about high school is meeting new people, learning a new stuff, and making friends. He considers himself to be outgoing because he likes to hang out and talk with his friends in his free time. He also considers himself to be cautious. He acts very carefully in order to avoid possible danger. He likes to play sports very much.
He doesn't know where he'll be or what he'll be doing in 20 years.
2006-09-07 22:54:30 · answer #2 · answered by ? 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Brian, who can be descirbed as an active and funny person is very functual. The group who reflects his personality best is Three Days Grace because they have a great deal of enthusiasm for music. His personality is one of the things that is admired by others.
He is a very funny, and nice guy. What he likes about being in high school is meeting new people and learning new stuff.
What he likes best about being in high school this year is making new friends. He does not know where he'll be, and what he'll be doing in 20 years. He considers himself to be outgoing because in his free time he likes to hang out and talk with his friends. He also considers himself to be cautious.
He acts very careful in order to avoid possible danger.
He likes to play sports very much.
2006-09-07 22:45:15 · answer #3 · answered by Amanda 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Brian, who can be described as an active and funny person, is very functual. The group who reflects his personality best is Three Days Grace, because they have a great deal of enthusiasm for music. His personality is one of things that is admired by others.
He is very funny and he is a very nice guy. What he likes about being in high school is meeting new people and learning new stuff.
What he likes best about being in high school this year is making new friends. He doesn't know where he'll be or what he'll be doing in 20 years. He considers himself outgoing because he likes to talk and hang out with his friends in his free time. He also considers himself to be cautious, since he acts very carefully to avoid possible danger.
He also loves sports.
now gimmee my 10 points
2006-09-07 23:08:50 · answer #4 · answered by twinklee_x3 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Listen, if you're in high school, I feel really bad for you. Your writing is awful. My writing wasn't even that bad in the sixth grade. You should get some tutoring or something. Oh well. Here is what I did to make it better. I would rather rewrite the whole thing because it looks/sounds like something a ten year old would write.
Brian, who can be descirbed as an active and funny person is very functual. The group who reflects his personality best is Three Days Grace because they have a great deal of enthusiasm for music. His personality is one of things that is admired by others.
He is very funny and he is a very nice guy. What he likes about being in high school is meeting new people and learning new things.
What he likes best about being in high school this year is making new friends. He doesn't know where he'll be, and what he'll be doing in twenty years. He considers himself to be outgoing; he likes haning out with his friends and talking to them during his free time. He also considers himself to be cautious.
He acts very carefully in order to avoid possible danger.
He also likes to play sports very much.
2006-09-07 22:46:01 · answer #5 · answered by disco.party 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
As an active and FUN person is very PUNCTUAL (functual ??? or functional ???)
Reflects his personality best is: " Three Days Grace"...
He DOES NOT know where he WILL be OR what he WILL be in 20 years.
...his free time and talk with THEM (no repetition of friends)
... to avoid possible dangerS.
He LIKES to play sports.
Very Good. Just a few things. Keep it up!
2006-09-07 22:46:43 · answer #6 · answered by Izzy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Ok first you need to get rid of the space after Brian and before the comma. Described is spelled wrong. you need a comma after person in the first sentence. the "he is very funny and he is a very nice guy" is an incomplete sentence and you are repeating yourself from your first sentence. "what he likes about high school...." sentence, at the end you wrote "and learn a new stuff" which doesnt make any sense. and "is to meet new people" is redundant. it should read " What he likes about being in hight school is meeting new people...."
you were right you do have bad grammer!!!!
Your sentence "he considers himself to be outgoing...." should read: He considers himself to be outgoing, because he likes to hang out with his friends, and easily engages in conversation. You have a lot of "he" in the end there. You should put his name in there again. Like where you write "He acts very carefully in order to avoid possible danger." I would join that with the previous sentence and put, " Brian, tries to avoid possible danger by being cautious and tries to be careful.
Now your last sentence is kind of hanging out there on a limb. You need to remember that the end of your essay needs to sum up what you are trying to talk about. Or in other words, where you make your point. If it is about Brian's personality you would want to sum up in a sentence or two everything that you wrote about prior in your essay. If it is about the band Three Days Grace. Then you need to say something about the band. Oh and play is spelled wrong in your last sentence.
Hope fully this helps and hopefully i can have ten points? thanks in advance!!
2006-09-07 22:56:18 · answer #7 · answered by goodtimincountry 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, I think you just need to re-read your own writing.
A couple of hints: who or whom?
"learn a new stuff"... "play sports very much."
2006-09-07 22:39:42 · answer #8 · answered by D 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would, but I don't have a red pencil that works on computers.
2006-09-07 22:43:46 · answer #9 · answered by Flea© 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋