if you likecheesy depressing poetry will you please read this and tell me what you think? (i didnt write it)?

Question

what do you think of this.How does it make you feel.(i feel like doctor phil hahah!)
chained down by reality cut open by stress
So down to earth her wrist has a gashing crevis
So scared sad and confused a mess
She feels like everyone could care less
Black mascara and eyeliner running down her pale pink cheeks
Along with the tears of misery puring down like a stream
Red lipstick smeared across her thick lips
The same color as the blood running down her wrists
lieing on the cold linoleum floor
her dark hair across her face she has been here before
Her brown eyes filled with a pained __expression so far from dry
she knows she has to leave here this is her last cry
cracks open a bottle of toxic stuff poors it down her throat
falls down to the floor as her favorite band pumping through the speakers plays the last note
closes her eyes her brain turns off
her boyfriend comes home and he wants to scoff
Why because she looked so elegant in that black dress
with her pretty little face and dark makeup her black hair a mess
he holds her as tears fall from his face
One last time he kisses her ruby lips and can taste her beauty and grace!

1 hour ago - 3 day(s) left to answer. - 3 answers

Answer 1

ITS IS A VERY DEEP POEM...FOR THOSE WHO HAVE BEEN THERE IN ONE WAY OR ANOTHER THEY CAN RELATE...FOR THOSE WHO HAVE NOT IT MAY SOUND HORRID AND SICK...I THINK IT HAS DEPTH AND SOUL FULL OF SADNESS...

Answer 2

As you say, it's not very good poetry. The forced rhymes, the spelling, the lack of any poetic structure.... the inconsistency (presumably her boyfriend would not be tasting 'beauty and grace' but rather the 'toxic stuff' she had just imbibed!) and the grotesque images...

However..... I'd be less concerned about the quality of the poem and more concerned about whoever wrote it. To me this sort of self-expression looks like a cry for help - or at least a preoccupation with pain and death that should be a warning signal to friends and family. The feeling that 'everyone could care less' (sic) is probably one of the most depressing and enervating (energy-sucking) emotions on the planet. I hope no one you know feels this way!

Thanks for posting and asking. Perhaps you are in a position to get some one some help, or at least a listening ear.

Answer 3

Very depressing- I feel for the sad woman. Despite the spelling errors, it has a very nice flow.

Answer 4

why do you keep asking the same question?