Can anyone help me with this....?

Question

I'm 14, I'm high school. We were asked to write a 300 word essay about "Countries helping each other". I'm from india. I don't have anyone to talk to now, please comment on it, or if you want, edit it: pls, thanks

It’s amazing to think how the Earth from being so inhospitable to life became such an organized, civilized and nice place to live at. We established countries so we can live a better life: secure, bountiful and free. We have the responsibility for it, for our countrymen and everything in it. Very noble indeed, but is it right to just limit our minds within the frontiers of our own country? Why not instead of just caring for your countrymen, care for everyone?
Many countries already took initiative in making this dream come true. One very good example is the UNITED NATIONS which aims at facilitating co-operation in international law, international security, economic development, and social equity. .......................

However, no matter how much we strive to achieve those goals, there is still the fact that most of the countries still belong to the “Third World”. Why? Very simple, because oftentimes we give efforts to help others overseas but we don’t give a hint that we intend to do more than just “give”. This reminds me of a quote from Lao Tzu, “Give a man a fish and you feed him for a day. Teach a man to fish and you feed him for a lifetime". The global community should focus on helping the countries in need to improve their quality of life on a long term basis and really act on it.
Definitely, this idea is too ambitious and will take allot of effort to take place. But if people, especially those who are in power give emphasis to this issue, slowly the world will cease to be a place where a few dominates, but a place where people share the same set of mind, that we have a responsibility for everyone and that we’re all just living in one place.

Answer 1

If you send it to me via email and give me your email address I will edit it for you. It's too long to do in the yahoo answer field.

Answer 2

Wow this is a big one...I do believe that charity begins at home If we as a people would just look around there's plenty of things we could do. Doing for others,putting others ahead of ourselves, caring for others. It seems the world is all about selfishness. You sound like a very intelligent boy and you've got a good head on your shoulders. You can make things better...try.