a guy and a girl met on YAHOO Answers. The dude was 15 and the girl was 13. They started talking on Instant Messenger. They found out that they had so much in common. After a while, both had a crush on each other. They talked about everything. The guy told the girl that he had a crush on her, and the girl told him that she had a crush on her as well.
As days went by, they fell in love. There was only one problem, they were from different countries.
But they had so much in common.
The guy had dreams about her, and the girl had dreams about him.
One time, the guy told the girl that he had fallen in love with her. The girl told him that she was in love with him as well.
One day, they talked about a date in Paris.
The guy told the girl that her kiss was worth 1 million dollars. They would go on their date in Paris 10 years from now, they will never forget each other, because true love never ends.
They talked about the engagement ring, they were madly in love.
Theu guy was really happy, and the girl was happy as well.
The guy told the girl that he will go look for her 10 years from now.
They talked about the movie, The Notebook, Moulin Rouge, they were romantic.
But one day, the girl told her friends about him. Her friends told her that the guy was some old guy, that the guy was a liar.
The girl believed them and told the guy that she never wanted to talk to him again.
The guy was heartbroken, he cried and cried.
One day, the girl started talking to him again, because she had not forgot about him. She still loved him. But if her friends found out that she was still talking to him, they would kill her, and will never talk to her again.
As days went by, the guy told the girl that he loved her.
Think of me when your day is done,look out your window and i'll be your setting sun... think of me now, and ill be with you soon, look out the window and ill be your moon. think of me now where ever you are, look out the window and ill be the stars... think of me now, and ill wipe away your tears, look out your window to release all your fears .. think of me cuz i cant look in your eyes.. though were not together, we'd see the same sky.
I thank God he sent you to me,
For you and I were meant to be.
We have a bond too strong to break,
We have a love no one can take.
In you, I have found a love so true,
My heart is filled with love for you.
Every time I talk to you, my heart skips a beat,
You make my life whole, you make my life complete.
My love for you grows more with each passing day,
The thought of your gorgeous face takes my breath away:
Those brown eyes fill my soul with happiness,
Those luscious lips I long to kiss.
The day when you become my wife,
Will be the happiest day of my life.
Even thinking of that day makes me smile,
I can't wait 'till I walk down that aisle.
I dream of that day when we'll both say, "I do"
For always and forever... I will love you.
He was truly in love.
But one day the girl told him that their love was impossible, they lived in different countries, they will never meet.
The guy told her that they were meant to be, and that they will gonna end up together.
The girl told the guy that only if they were truly meant to be, they will meet someday. The last words of the girl were "I love you"
Then, she never spoke to him again. The guy was depressed, he cried every night, thinking about her, he said that love was crap, there is no thing as true love.
5 years later he met her on DisneyLand. He saw her and saw something familiar in her. He approached her and inmediately, the girl knew who he was.
They were a little surprised. But they talked about their life, and they went to the park.
In the park the guy told the girl that he still loved her, It takes a minute to have a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, and a day to love someone -- but it takes a lifetime to forget someone.
The girl told him that it will be difficult for them to keep a long distance relationship.
The girl told him that they will meet again soon, but right now, she was in college, and so was he. If they were truly meant to be, they will meet again another time.
They kissed. The kiss of true love.
5 years later the guy had not seen the girl again. He was now 25 years old and he had a good job, he was rich.
Sometimes at night, he still cried for her, he still in love with her. His friends said that he needed to give up, he will never see her again, he needed to move on.
The guy was determined to find his cinderella and marry her.
He went to a wedding dress shop every week, he enjoyed wacthing the dresses, he always looked the perfect one.
One time, when he entered the wedding dress shop, he heard the girl`d name.
He turned around and he saw her with a guy.
He approached her and said "hey remember me"? "I`m Ricky"
"Why didnt u wait for me, i still love you"
"I`m getting married in 2 weeks, i thought u had forgotten about me. I love him"
The guy was heartbroken.
2 weeks later he went to the wedding and told the girl, in front of everyone how much he loved her, and inside the church he asked her if she wanted to marry him.
The girl just told him and said "sorry, i did love you, but it was not meant to be, i`m marrying Matt now. Bye"
The guy was destroyed.
THE END
2006-09-06 14:06:31 · 19 answers · asked by »isabélle« 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
yeah---the ending sucked. i can't believe i just wasted all that time wading through the story, pulling for this poor guy, rooting for this poor guy---only to have him bravely propose to her during her wedding--and then she blows him off like he was nothing.
"the guy was destroyed"
s h i t
2006-09-06 16:19:13 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 1⤋
It's good you've got an interest in writing, but if you want to pursue it as a hobby or career, you will need to take many more writing and language courses.
Slang terms are okay, if the writer shows a strong understanding of grammar, and uses the slang during dialog. Utilization of slang in the descriptive portions of a story is distracting and shows a lack of imagination.
Your grasp of grammar is tenuous - i.e. 'he enjoyed watching the dresses'. You 'watch' people, you 'look at', or 'view' things.
If you'd like to read a writer who uses slang and 'modern' language in an exciting and fun way, check out Neal Stephenson. I'd recommend Snow Crash as a good starting point.
If you turned this in as an assignment in a High School creative writing class, it would earn a C- or D.
A few more years, and a lot more school, and you may write something worth reading.
2006-09-08 18:43:02 · answer #2 · answered by ducatisti 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
aww thats so cute
2014-05-02 04:24:44 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I should get 10 points, just for being a sport and reading that whole thing that was REALLY long! And if I would have known that it had as bad ending, I probably wouldn't have!
2006-09-06 14:14:21 · answer #4 · answered by pitbull lover 5 · 2⤊ 0⤋
I didn't care for it, I'm afraid. It's long, highly improbable in both structure and dialog, maudlin, and lacking in characterization.
"The guy was destroyed" ranks up there with "It was a dark and stormy night".
2006-09-06 14:13:28 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Hey...I might look like I can't talk with this mask on...but take it off of me and I turn into a Jabberwalkie...so it's not that long to me...don't listen to all those poo-pooers for your story.
It's creative writing...So I'm not going to complain a bit...
sad...but I'm glad I read it! Thanks!
SmileyCat : )
2006-09-06 14:39:24 · answer #6 · answered by SmileyCat : ) 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Good and long for a Yahoo Question.
2006-09-06 14:10:39 · answer #7 · answered by Ahab 5 · 3⤊ 0⤋
wow what a depressing story. i thought he would actually end up marrying her. this was really good. you have some talent in your writing but it needs to be tweaked a bit in some areas but everything else is really really good. the story was nice at first but depressing at the end. you actually fooled me. the story was great do you mind if i email it to a couple of my friends?
2006-09-06 14:14:30 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 2⤋
sounds familiar..rings a bell...
heh....where'd you get the story?....
the girl is such a B****.....
lol.....the guy seems sweet and head over heels in love...lol
with some more detail and believable dialouge...it'd make a sad interesting story.
2006-09-06 17:04:58 · answer #9 · answered by Leia Skywalker 4 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Not really... Try to keep in mind.... this is a QUESTION and ANSWER site... not a "corny writers" audition area.
2006-09-06 14:09:40 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 1⤋