Can you please check my grammar?

Question

Can you check my grammar? I think i have problem with the tense because in the beginning i am generalizing, and in the end, i talk about a scnerio in the past

In any business, the bottom line should not come at any price. Stockholders, business partners, and employees have much to gain through the implementation of an ethics program. Since trust is one of the most vital assets than a company can possess, then maintaining the highest ethical standards will only add to a company's value and success. Being the founder and the CEO of the company, Mr. Feuerstein had the responsibility to the workers. Mr. Feuerstein’s uncommon commitment to his employees and community was recognized by the business world. He definitely won employees’ hearts by showing his loyalty and dedication to them. In the field of business, the loyalty bonded individual workers to a single company. Mr. Feuerstein became the famous guy in the business world, and his actions boosted the reputation of his company.

Feuerstein's driving presence and his reputation as a job-saver have become Malden Mills's best assets.

Answer 1

Here is how I might write this (a few modifications):

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In any business, the bottom line should not come "at any price." Stockholders, business partners, and employees have much to gain through the implementation of an ethics program. Since trust is one of the most vital assets a company can possess, maintaining the highest ethical standards will only add to a company's value and success.

As founder and CEO of the company, Mr. Feuerstein had a responsibility to his workers. Mr. Feuerstein’s uncommon commitment to his employees and community is recognized in the business world. He won employees’ hearts by showing loyalty and dedication to them. This loyalty, in turn, bonded individual workers to a single company. Mr. Feuerstein became famous in the business world, and his actions boosted the reputation of his company.
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I agree with what someone else said about starting a new paragraph when going from the general ideas to the specific example. Otherwise, your grammar looks fine, and I removed some extraneous words.

A suggestion: you may want to add a specific manner in which Mr. Feuerstein showed loyalty to his workers. For example, did he enhance retirement benefits or general benefits for length of service? Or, since you spoke of trust, perhaps he delegated more authority to them. Otherwise, you're simply telling us that he was a great guy, but we don't really *see* it. ("Show, don't tell.")

I hope that helps. : )

Answer 2

In any business, the bottom line should not come at any price.

*Are you speaking of financial bottom line or reference bottom line?*
Stockholders, business partners, and employees have much to gain through the implementation of an ethics program. Since trust is one of the most vital assets tha*t a company can possess, (omit then) maintaining the highest ethical standards will only add to a company's value and success. Being the founder and the CEO of the company, Mr. Feuerstein * responsibility was to *mentor to the workers. Mr. Feuerstein’s uncommon commitment to his employees and community was recognized by the business world. He definitely won employees’ hearts by showing his loyalty and dedication to them. In the field of business, the loyalty bonded individual workers to *the company. Mr. Feuerstein became the famous guy in the business world, and his actions boosted the reputation of his company. Thus, this would result in a team of positive and productive workers also resulting in an increasing bottom line for years to come.

Answer 3

In any business, the bottom line should not come at any price. Stockholders, business partners, and employees have much to gain through the implementation of an ethics program. Since trust is one of the most vital assets THAT a company can possess, then maintaining the highest ethical standards will only add to a company's value and success. Being the founder and the CEO of the company, Mr. Feuerstein IS RESPONSIBLE to the workers. Mr. Feuerstein’s uncommon commitment to his employees and community HAS BEEN recognized by the business world. He definitely HAS won employees’ hearts by showing his loyalty and dedication to them. In the field of business, the loyalty bonded individual workers to a single company. (awkard sentence, maybe try: In the field of business, loyal employees operate as one of a company.) Mr. Feuerstein HAS BECOME the famous MAN in the business world, and his actions HAS boosted the reputation of his company.

*corrections are capitalized
*use the present perfect tense to indicate action that has happend in the past but has continued to the present (i.e. Mr. Feuerstein was famous in the past but is still famous now. he hasn't lost any fame since the past.)

Answer 4

This is not, strictly speaking, a grammar issue. The problem here is that you change subject in mid-paragraph without making it clear what you are doing ; the sentence beginning 'Being the founder...' offers an example ( past tense is, therefore, appropriate ! ) to support your general argument above, you just neglected to introduce it as such ( this was perhaps dealt with in your previous paragraph !? - if so, some such alteration as ' As mentioned above, Mr Feuerstein, being the founder and... ' ). Hope this helps.

Answer 5

you said 1st of all " Since trust is one of the most bital assets than a company can possess..." than is suposed to be that. other than that, the rest seems fine. just write more at the end comparing the story about mr. feuerstein with what you wrote. explain how they are tied together.

Answer 6

Mr feuerstein became the most famous guy in the business world, etc

Answer 7

Looks good--it should say trust is one of the most vital assets THAT a company can posses--not than.

Otherwise looks good.

Answer 8

Your grammar is fine. You need to start a new paragraph when you go from the general to the specific.

Answer 9

It sounds good to me, but my main focus was subject-verb agreement.

Answer 10

I ts fine