do you like my poem?

Question

to my secret velintine
from your only sunshine

I should have love you more in time
but instead i drank summer wine gasping at the sunshine

i clambed a masculine pine
and from it i drink its posion turpentine

then i dreamed of you
you were mine and covered in vine
on top of are pine and we were
making love in the devine sunshine


what dose everyone thing how can i make it better is it in a poem form any idea's

Answer 1

Dont change a thing you made it your own....:)

Answer 2

I couldn't even make sense of half this chit.

It amazes me that you can spell words like masculine correctly but get all spoofed on words like climbed.

Answer 3

Avrerage rating... I will give 6 out of 10. read it and remove unnecessary terms.

Answer 4

Your poem is quite ok..It would be more interesting if you create a poem with another theme........Not just love.ok?... ; )

Answer 5

the best poems don't rhyme..and try that little box that says spell check!

Answer 6

roses are red,
violets are blue,
your poem sucks badly,
it made me spew.

Answer 7

if you like your poem the way it is then i wouldn't change it.