If it just means improve it, then it's way too vague. I thought my essay was good! Any ideas of something else that this means?
2006-09-05 17:57:46 · 13 answers · asked by ? 4 in Education & Reference ➔ Higher Education (University +)
Thanks all, I'm sure that is exactly what he means. Now, if I can just figure out how to do it...
2006-09-05 18:17:37 · update #1
There must have been too many "beating around the bush" compound and complex paragraphs that you could have shortened to one or two sentences. Tightening the narration means telling it as plainly as is--concise, cohesive (logical) and simple. Break each compound sentence into separate sentences then eliminate the superfluous ones (or those that have no direct relation to the narrative sence itself. Also, eliminate those conjunctions, unless you think they are absolutely necessary.
2006-09-05 18:04:53 · answer #1 · answered by Bummerang 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋
You may have used more words than neccesary to describe or tell something. Try to cut back on so many descriptive words in the narrative. Try to think of "a word "
to use in place of where you used several words.You may need to make sure that your point is getting across and the reader knows exactly which character is speaking each time in the narration also.It is hard to give help when the paper isn't here to see! Best wishes!
2006-09-05 18:08:02 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hi Chica,
The essay probably lacks good flow - a must have in order to tell a good story. Try to re-read your essay objectively, as if you have never read the contents before. Or better yet, ask a friend to read it for you and give you some tips as to where the story isn't clear/ideas need further development. Try to ensure that you have good transitions between paragraphs/ideas. Be open to suggestion and remember that most good stories are not written in the first draft. Good luck!
2006-09-05 18:06:13 · answer #3 · answered by ranitita 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Narration is the practice of adding in details to explain the natural course of the work. For instance in a play, a narrator will come out to read information into the progress of the story for the benefit of the audience. I would assume to tighten it up, you need to give only the most basic information necessary to carry the rest of the story or report from the point you;ve brought your reader to before the narration, to the point the story or report can carry on.
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2006-09-05 18:06:45 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
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2016-03-26 23:54:05 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like your essay was a bit wordy. Try going back and eliminating unnecessary words.
Example: I am of the belief all people should try and be good to each other.
Better: I believe people should be good to others.
2006-09-05 18:02:47 · answer #6 · answered by all1g8r 4 · 3⤊ 0⤋
It means that it is too wordy and verbose. You need to focus better on the main points and not blather on so much about the side issues.
2006-09-05 18:02:24 · answer #7 · answered by Bethany 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
I could be wrong, as I was never an English major, but I think he means your narratives drone on too long. I'd cut them down. Make them shorter.
Also, it's possible you explain too much, explain unnecessary details, or repeat yourself.
2006-09-05 18:01:47 · answer #8 · answered by kickbutt 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yo essay---it means you talk too much.
Stick to the facts Holmes.
2006-09-05 18:01:29 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're probably using too many words and not getting to the point quickly or efficiently enough.
2006-09-05 18:01:16 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋