i want to become a singer? i wrote a song what do you think? my song is in the details?

Question

Everywhere I go everyone I see you're still a part of me. You're still in my heart. Your smile, your laugh, the twinkle in your eye won't leave me till i die. No matter what they say, you're stil in my heart.

I think about you every day you're in my heart and your there to stay. I wonder if you think of me its clear to see you're still in my heart.

Everywer I go everyone I see you're still a part of me. You're still in my heart. Your smile your laugh, the twinkle in your eye won't leave me till I die. No matter what they say, you're still in my heart.

There's never a minute that I could admit it. Don't you see me standin here. I'm waiting for you to realize what your missing without me here by your side. You're still stil in my heart.

You're in my heart and your here to stay I think about you everyday. I know you see me standin here. I can't lvie without you. You're still in my heart.


whisper: and you're there to stay


written by tori vandal, thanks 4 reading*

I am only 13 almost 15 what do you think?

i mean i am 13 almost 14 lol

Answer 1

You repeat way to much. Like the first paragraph it would be better if you didnt type that 1 a second time. You say things like your still in my heart and that a lil to much and it could be a bit longer. But otherwise. PERFECTO!

Answer 2

i really like it.
if i ever lost the guy im with now i think song would be wonderful in describing how i feel

Answer 3

thats a pretty song and i think you can be but juss sum lil things like spellin but dat aint big but its good :)

Answer 4

i think you should not post things that you do not have a copy write for. someone can come along and steal your song. and make it thier own.

Answer 5

I like that. I want to be a singer too.

Answer 6

it looks good..

You will have to try out for American Idol in a few years.

Answer 7

dont stop ya never know