why is it all so hard for me
so confusing
a never ending maze of emotions
when will it end
all so high strung
verging on insanity
is it mild schizophrenia
if i yell out "leave me alone"
i know you can't see them
but the emotions are there
pestering me
telling me to feel the way they say
like cold metal shocked by a burst of flames
their demands are never persistent
does this deem me bipolar
a slave to emotion
oppressed by feeling
does this make me not my own person
a zombie
it's all so difficult to me
so mind boggling
when will it become clear
like a fresh water lake
not polluted by fear, misconceptions, and ignorance
judgements so harsh you want to vanish
does suicide lurk in dark corners
calling out to you
begging you to accept it's path
and if you do
are you a quitter, looking for the easy way out
or did you choose what was the last option you had
well run dry from excessive use
you grown tired over exertion
life so tough
living so difficult
fine I'll admit it...
I'm schizophrenic
2006-09-05 07:55:20 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
bipolar
a zombie
a quitter
it'll never be easy
never a clear shot
sorry about the cut off it was too long
2006-09-05 07:55:38 · update #1
Your poem is very descriptive and you use an excellent selection of words.
2006-09-05 08:02:22 · answer #1 · answered by sunflowerlizard 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I like some of the lines "like a cold metal shocked by a burst of flames" and "not polluted by fear, misconceptions, and ignorance judgments so harsh you want to vanish does suicide lurk in the dark corners calling out to you"
However the flow is off. Too everyday and then picturesque..... I think if you shortened it down and did not mention the schizophrenic or bipolar issues until the very end it would tie it together rather than in the beginning middle and end.....all in all though good just a little work and less words! Good luck!
2006-09-05 08:06:06 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This poem reflect the things that torment you, I have been Thur times of torment to. What do you think?Losing it not being able to take it much longer, I am becoming weak it is becoming stronger.Confused feelings out of control, struggling to remain sane. As this demon get a hold, I become insane.Abandoned, left all alone,scared and chilled to the bone. Displaced, alone heart breaking into, screaming crying,silence, what do I do?
2006-09-05 08:07:55 · answer #3 · answered by dancinintherain 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really enjoyed your poem. I liked it better without the Additional Details part. End it with "I'm schizophrenic" I like that alot. Great Job!
2006-09-05 08:01:21 · answer #4 · answered by InsufficientLoser 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Its dark, just drop the Bipolar and Schizophrenic.
2006-09-05 08:19:18 · answer #5 · answered by Dawn Treader 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it
2006-09-05 07:58:20 · answer #6 · answered by ? 6 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Its Deep!--But I Like It Though. . . . .
2006-09-05 08:01:28 · answer #7 · answered by ~♥~Piglet~♥~ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
good poem'''''
2006-09-05 07:59:20 · answer #8 · answered by SUN FLOWER 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋