This is another question related to the story I am writing.
Okay, would you please tell me if this sentence sounds right.
“Only adding to its demonic appearance was the fact that its lips were pulled back in a feral snarl, revealing a pair of elongated, gore-drenched canines.”
I am not sure if it does or not, but something seems off about it to me.
P.S. They really should have a writing category.
2006-09-05 04:07:45 · 7 answers · asked by CrimsonH 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
This is another question related to the story I am writing.
Okay, would you please tell me if this sentence sounds right.
“Only adding to its demonic appearance was the fact that its lips were pulled back in a feral snarl, revealing a pair of elongated, gore-drenched canines.”
I am not sure if it does or not, but something seems off about it to me.
P.S. They really should have a writing category.
I thought I would add the definition to the word snarl.
Main Entry: 3snarl
Function: verb
Etymology: frequentative of obsolete English snar to growl; akin to Middle Low German snorren to drone, rattle
intransitive verb
1 : to growl with a snapping, gnashing, or display of teeth
2 : to give vent to anger in surly language
transitive verb : to utter or express with a snarl or by snarling
- snarl•er noun
2006-09-05 04:24:41 · update #1
I think it's fine.
snarl-
to growl threateningly or viciously, esp. with a raised upper lip to bare the teeth, as a dog.
2006-09-05 04:13:00 · answer #1 · answered by Iridium190 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think something feral would growl, not snarl. Snarl is too learned and stifled. Something feral is more gutteral and untrained--growl or hiss is less repressed.
Totally agree about a writing category!
2006-09-05 04:13:41 · answer #2 · answered by Kindred 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
snarl sounds fine, but rather than the lips being 'pulled back', perhaps they should 'curl menaceingly, slick with clear ochre'....Yes?
2006-09-05 11:24:29 · answer #3 · answered by Tom I 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think that sounds great... It is difficult for many people (i.e. me) to be able to create such imagery and I think you did it very well.
2006-09-05 07:01:04 · answer #4 · answered by EvilFairies 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great question
2016-08-08 14:19:26 · answer #5 · answered by ? 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
so glad that I found this topic already answered! it's like you read my mind!
2016-08-23 06:12:28 · answer #6 · answered by cheryl 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
thanks to each and every one of you for the answers!
2016-09-25 07:42:59 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋