i'm going to beat frank up today after i go to work . but keep him in the basemtn. no food or water
2006-09-05 02:18:14 · 5 answers · asked by Why Does It Do That? 1 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
it's for fanfiction -.-
2006-09-05 02:26:15 · update #1
"I'm going to beat Frank up after I get back from work. But keep him in the basement--no food or water."
that is probably how i'd phrase it, based on your original sentences. of course you must realize that in extremely formal writing, the second sentence would be a nightmare, but for something like a novel, it's fine. Just starting with "But..." and using "--" to draw two fragments together is sometimes frowned upon in the english world. but i do it anyhow in my writing, and no one's complained yet. haha.
2006-09-05 02:26:27 · answer #1 · answered by answers, answers 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
After I go to work today, I'm going to beat up Frank. Then, I will keep him in the basement with no food or water.
OR
When I get home from work today, I'm going to beat up Frank. Then, I will keep him in the basement with no food or water.
Wow, you're mean!!!
2006-09-05 09:38:44 · answer #2 · answered by Ms. G. 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
i'm going to beat frank up today after i go to work . but keep him in the basemtn. no food or water
(What?) I'm going to beat up on Frank
"You're not going to beat Frank 'up'. Up where?"
(When?) today, after work,
"You're not going to do this at work"
(How?) (How will I do it, or what else will I do?)
and I will keep him in the basement without food and water.
2006-09-05 09:40:55 · answer #3 · answered by ed 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Today, at (or after)work I'll first beat Frank up and then I'll starve him in the basement.
2006-09-05 13:37:09 · answer #4 · answered by chocolatebunny 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You need help alright, but not with wording.
2006-09-05 09:24:49 · answer #5 · answered by Shody 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋