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2006-09-04 02:40:55 · 12 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
Dear Diary,
This is my second day of the trip with Alicia’s family. I woke up really early, because I’m really excited about today. We are going to take a walk around the harbor. It was a long drive, when we arrived, I immediately jumped out of the car. I smelled, the air it smelled of salt and dead fish. When I looked down, I saw lots of crumpled cans and bottles, which isn’t a good sign. Then I saw several maritime stores and I might go in. There were lots of things; I brought chocolate bars, a flashlight, sunglasses and the most important thing, batteries. When I came out, the first thing I saw was the graffiti on the wall. I thought it was beautiful, but then I realize that my shoes were soaking wet. So I kicked my shoe as hard as I could, trying to fling the water from my shoes. After my shoes were all dry, I saw Alex and Alicia were talking on the jetty, so I joined them. We talked about what had happened yesterday.
19 minutes ago
They urged me to follow were ever they whent so that I won’t get lost. Finally it was dinnertime, Alicia’s mom took out a grill, and we were going to barbecue! The barbecues were delicious! I was full and happy today, not like yesterday. (Can’t find the way out of the old mine
2006-09-04 02:57:19 · answer #1 · answered by steamroller98439 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Okay, you've been at it for a while and so many reactions and responses might have caused you to smile, grumble or even pity yourself. The best way is to do it yourself.
Pretend that the diary is another friend. Then pretend that you are telling her what happened today (for everyday).
What happened in the morning? Why? How did you feel? How about lunch? What did you have? Who were you with? Did you enjoy lunch? What did you do in the afternoon? Was it what ypou usually do? At the end of the day, how would you say your day as a whole was? Did you learn anything new today? If yes, what is that new lesson?
The grammatical and spelling errors may happen but you are telling it the way it is (except that instead of speaking of it, you are writing about it). But at least it will be your own narrative as you experienced all those things for that day.
2006-09-04 09:55:27 · answer #2 · answered by Bummerang 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
2 points
2006-09-04 09:50:56 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
2 points
2006-09-04 09:47:08 · answer #4 · answered by alandicho 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Yes, you have grammar and spelling errors. Copy and paste in Microsoft word and that will find some of them for you. The diary format is fine. Don't double post questions--confusing.
2006-09-04 09:47:03 · answer #5 · answered by violetb 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Apparently you need some help learning how to get results from Yahoo answers as well.
2006-09-04 09:49:30 · answer #6 · answered by Iknowthisone 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
As a former high school teacher, my advice would be to do your own homework. You will never learn any other way.
2006-09-04 09:51:12 · answer #7 · answered by Irish1952 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I am 38 yrs. old, and certainly did not get to where I am or what I am doing by having someone else do my work for me. Get off your lazy butt and do it yourself!
2006-09-04 09:52:01 · answer #8 · answered by Firefly 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
He is my advice - do your own homework - if I do it or someone else you really are going to learn.
2006-09-04 09:46:03 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
On what???? Why not post your question here??? Weirdo
2006-09-04 09:42:55 · answer #10 · answered by icyhott4urmind 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋