Tell me if you like this poem,Be honest?

Question

Eternity(Thank you)

And forever and ever will it be you that will make me think that I am so clever

Every night walk and bedside joke

The best of wishes and the proudest of smiles

That meant so much when I was feeling blue

Without you would be like having no clue

To the truth that you’re my Elmer’s glue

Thank you

And forever and ever it will be you that I’ll always remember

For the cry’s but most of all the lies you’ve overcome

You are truly the definition of what a mother is and what a mother means

Yeah, we all mess up

But you fixed all mistakes and did without the tiniest of regrets

And forever and ever it will be you that will make me think eternity was really the thought of how you always are there even in bad weather

Thank you

Answer 1

Of course.
It is literature and as long as it is literature it is beautiful as the English Language is the most beautiful of all languages.

Answer 2

I love artistic people. People of like mind, i enjoy. If I may offer some of my opinion... I think you have a great imagination and have some good inspiration, all though I think that trying to get things to rhyme took away from what you were trying to portray. I believe that you have some raw talent and should definitely try to develop this as best as you can. Try writing how you think. If you just let it flow you will strike gold! Try not to fit into a category. This will help you achieve your potential. Artistic ability is not bound by others limitations but only by thyself. Keep up the work and work with your own style.

Answer 3

Like?
Any mother would cry, give you a hug, and tell you it was wonderful.
A classicist would note the lack of rhythm and rime.
Myself, I found the sentence lengths distracting, the Elmer's glue metaphor pulled me back into "hard copy", and the sentiment revealed a great love. A+ on soul, C on delivery.

Answer 4

Creative writing is never wrong. There are some poems with only one or two words in them. I feel poetry is expressionism and the primary function is to "paint a picture" on a topic that others take for granted. You may want to re-organize your prose based on this.

Answer 5

Αρνακι ασπρο και παχυ της μανας του καμαρι,
εβοσκε εις την εξοχη και το χλωρο χορταρι!

Answer 6

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Answer 7

I think poetry is like beauty, beauty is in the eye of the beholder. This poem is beautiful because I can really feel the emotion you put into it. Well done.

Answer 8

it's not that great. ask some ppl about better stuff, because i'm not in the mood to give good advice. the elmers glue thing is sort of gay. just find better rhymes, and dont make it so corny. constructive criticism.

Answer 9

This is not poetry. I don't know exactly what it is, but it's not poetry! Poetry is imagery and metaphor. It is a nice tribute to - I guess it's to your mother - but it's not poetry. And I really have to be honest. This is not the place to post things like this. This is a question and answer forum, not a forum for your creative endeavors.

Answer 10

I like the poem.

The opening line may need a little work though. I stumbled through it. Had to read it twice to get what it was trying to convey.