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Question

I'm a Chinese and the teacher told us to write an english diary, so I'm wondering can you plzzzzzzzzzzzz help me? Use your way of writing my diary or check if is there any grammar , spelling , phrase that is wrong! I can give you 10 points if you did a good job! You can change or add many dificult or funny words in my diary, make my diary more interesting, make my diary sound more like Americans.(I'm in 7th grade now)

Dear Diary,
Today, I was woken up by my indignant mom, knonking at my door. I glanced at my alarm clock, I knew that I had overslept. I splashed cold water on my face before getting dressed. I was tired and sleepy, cause I stayed up almost all night. When I got to school, I ignore my frineds, Christina and Naiomi, I was too tired to pay attention to them. For the whole day, I was imagining how cool of me being a spy and working for the MI6.

So I often got teacher's swearword for not concertrate in their class. It was a boring day at school, finally I got the chance to go home. It was a glorious night, I layed on my bed, watching the shining stars upon the big sky.
well my dear Diary, nothing really happend today. This is all I can write, sweet dreams to me!

Answer 1

Dear Diary,
Today I woke up when my mom knocked on my bedroom door. I knew this couldn't be a good sign. I glanced at my alarm clock, sure enough I had overslept. I bolted out of bed, quickly splashed cold water on my face and got dressed. I knew I shouldn't have stayed up so late last night but I just couldn't get myself to turn off the computer. :) I was chatting with the coolest guy he said he was a spy. We talked about all the great places he had visited. He said being a spy was nothing like what you see on t.v.
When I finally made it to school I ignored my friends, Christina and Naomi. I was too tired for any of their boring gossip. I couldn't concentration in any of my classes and found myself daydreaming about my new on-line friend all day. I can't wait to get home!

Answer 2

You need a few rectifications. Maybe ur diary should be like this:
Dear Diary,
Today, I was woken up by my indignant mom, KNOCKING at my door. I glanced at my alarm clock, I knew that I had overslept. I splashed cold water on my face before getting dressed. I was tired and sleepy, BECAUSE I stayed up almost all night. When I got to school, I IGNORED my frineds, Christina and Naiomi, I was too tired to pay attention to them. For the whole day, I KEPT imagining how cool IT WOULD BE of me being a spy and working for the MI6. So I got ALL THE TEACHERS' swearword for not CONCENTRATING in their classes. It was a boring day at school, I WAS SOO HAPPY TO RETURN HOME. It was a glorious night, I LAY on my bed, watching the shining stars upon the big sky.
well my dear Diary, nothing really happend today. This is all I can write, sweet dreams to me!



You are writing in your own diary,Debra!Common, be more casual. It all looks so formal, like a report! Make your diary more lively with exclamations and self-invented words so that you will enjoy your diary whenever you look at it. But I must say that your English is quite good. Are you really Chinese?Your name and ur friends' names dont seem so!
Will I get the 10 points???????????????

Answer 3

The right way:

Dear Diary,
Today I was woken up by my indignant mom knocking at my door. I glanced at my alarm clock, and knew that i had overslept. I splashed cold water on my face before getting dressed to get myself energized for the busy school day that laid ahead. I was so tired from the night before,I ignored my friends Christina and Naomi as I saw them in the school hallway. For the whole day I was imagining how cool it would be if I was a spy working for the MI6.

Answer 4

Well, since this is supposed to be an ENGLISH diary, you might try using the spell-checker. And the grammar: "I was woken up by my indignant mom" may be just short of technically correct, but it is awkward language. A girl who spoke English as a native would probably say "My mom woke me up angrily because I had overslept."

No, she wouldn't; they are not even that careful with English. They might say something like "Mom was on my case this morning because I slept late. I was up practically all night." But I wouldn't count on a typical American teenager being even that careful with language.

So are you trying to sound like an American, or are you trying to do an English language exercise? Maybe sound like a British girl of some 50 years ago?

I like the line about MI6, though: "All day I was imagining how cool it would be if I was a spy working for the MI-6."

Answer 5

Do a spell check first, there is one available, which i always use, when you post in Yahoo! Answers. Secondly, you could copy and paste into Microsoft Word and do a grammar check (look under tools). Then when you ask someone to edit it, at least the elementary mistakes will have been fixed.

Answer 6

Having numerous acquaintances is exciting, yet no longer continuously. So once you opt to have new acquaintances be careful to pass with the perfect buddy which you will help and that they might assist you.Its ok, be magnificent yet do no longer settle for all human beings as a pal and don't have faith them as in case you have usually used them from a protracted time.

Answer 7

First off, why do you have to mention that you are Chinese? From this end of the Y!A, potential answerers don't care and adds nothing from your main problem: the diary.

Secondly, yes you do have errors. Re-read the diary again.

Answer 8

Just a few spelling corrections...
knocking; because; ignored; friends

Otherwise it is good just the way it is.

Answer 9

Woke up this morning and ate some Chow Mein. Later came home and watch some episodic Korean 88-chapter emotional fictional love story film with a bunch of kids in it. Cried my tears out. My boyfriend committed suicide beause of the fact I watch so much of this crap. I am an emotionally unstable woman. I must Ching up my Cheng Chong and eat some more fried rice.

My father told me rice good for you. You must eat very much every day to make strong your body. So I can marry you into rich family. You be good wife okay daughter. Daddy love you very much.

I don't know... was that a good enough Ching Ching Chong?

Answer 10

Leave it exactly the way you wrote it. This is you. You should be proud.