It's 5:30 am. I reluctantly drag my body out of bed, pick out clothes for the day and walk into my bathroom. After getting ready, I go downstairs to eat my breakfast and at 7:00 I sit down at my desk and start school. You see, I’m home schooled and have been ever since 7th grade. While I used to think that this negatively affected some aspects of my life (such as a smaller group of friends than I would like to have), I have come to realize that being home schooled has definitely had an outstanding effect on my love of learning
2006-09-01 16:45:32 · 8 answers · asked by Anonymous in Education & Reference ➔ Higher Education (University +)
I am applying to Michigan State University.
2006-09-01 16:45:48 · update #1
Is this better?
It's 5:30 am. I reluctantly drag my body out of bed, pick out clothes for the day and walk into my bathroom. After getting ready, I go downstairs to eat my breakfast and at 7:00 to 1:45 I sit down at the desk in my dining room and start school. You see, I’m home schooled and have been ever since 7th grade. While I used to think that this negatively affected some aspects of my life, such as a smaller group of friends than I would like to have (I’m a very social person), I have come to realize that being home schooled has definitely had an outstanding effect on my love of learning.
2006-09-01 17:41:27 · update #2
Oops I meant is this better?
It's 5:30 am. I jump out of bed, pick out my clothes and walk into my bathroom. After getting readyfor the dayand eating breakfast I sit down at the desk in my dining room and start school. You see, I’m home schooled and have been since 7th grade. While I used to think that this negatively affected some aspects of my life, such as a smaller group of friends than I would like to have (I’m a very social person), I have come to realize that being home schooled has definitely had an outstanding effect on my love of learning.
2006-09-01 17:43:46 · update #3
That's excellent. It's personal and thoughtful. Now I'd go on to explain how you thiink being home schooled helped you. Next I'd let them know that you're excited about the prospect of college, what you think you'd get out of it and what you could bring to the school.
Good luck!
2006-09-01 16:51:47 · answer #1 · answered by eyz 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Well, if you want to attend Harvard or Yale, you should say that you're a member of the Taliban since they gave that one Taliban spokesman a free 4-year ride (at least that's my understanding).
I would talk about the home schooling and how it has developed you into the person you are today and how being home schooled will benefit Michigan by having you as a student.
I don't know if this helps but good luck, I hope you make it.
I also agree with the others, make it a little more cheerful and glad that you're home schooled. Sorry, at first I didn't fully understand the question.
2006-09-01 16:54:46 · answer #2 · answered by Firefly 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I'm not impressed. This reads more like a journal entry than an application essay. No one wants to know about your morning bathroom rituals. The "you see" is conversational in tone, which is out of place in an essay of this sort. Most importantly, your point (that homeschooling has made you love learning) is trite, and reveals nothing about you as a person.
(And frankly, I'm appalled that it takes you an hour and a half to get from your bed to your studies.)
The better college application essays that I've seen often focus on a particular incident or series of events that changed the life of a student, and taught them something profound about the world, or about themselves. Try that.
2006-09-01 19:45:32 · answer #3 · answered by X 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
(Politely)... This tone is a bit of a downer. It kind of sounds like you are presenting yourself as lazy. Try changing the tone and making it sound a bit more like you are interested in learning.
Maybe like:
"Beep Beep Beep! As the sun peeks through the curtains, my alarm sounds, signalling a fresh start to a new day. As I get out of bed, I think about what to wear. Once I'm finished preparing for the day, I go downstairs to the kitchen and start school. [Then use the rest of what you wrote. Starting with the sentence "You see, ..."].
2006-09-01 16:54:26 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
I think you are on the right track. I would make it more clear that you didn't have to travel anywhere to get to school. Until you say that you are home schooled, I didn't really grasp where you were going. Instead of telling me, make it clear from your narrative about your daily routine. Otherwise, I think the concept is great. Good luck!
2006-09-01 16:52:39 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
you're able to desire to tell them. in case you acquire economic help and the college would not be responsive to approximately your previous GPA, that could desire to count variety as fraud. additionally, you're think to tell them approximately your previous college (would not remember in case you probably did nicely there or not). Sorry
2016-10-01 04:59:41 · answer #6 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I went to State. Just don't have any obvious misspellings. You'll be fine. Seriously.
2006-09-01 17:44:33 · answer #7 · answered by john_eitel 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
fantastic.
2006-09-01 16:52:29 · answer #8 · answered by sandy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋